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AK47
06-04-2006, 04:49 AM
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::A niNjA sTorRY::

Prologue


Flames danced over the screams of the people of the Hidden village. The civilians scurried, carrying all their belongings, and ran out the gates of the Hidden Leaf. But at the same time a man ran towards the opposite direction of where the people were running. Shurikens came at him from above, and he blocked all three of them with his kunai. I’m almost there, he thought, just a few more blocks and I’m there. He saw the building of his destination. I can’t die here, I have to warn the Hokage.
“H okage-sama!” a yell came from throat, as he called from the ground.
A young man turned around to see who it was, he looked down and saw his fellow soldier running towards the building.
“Sir! The enemy is too persistent, they are going to penetrate through our last defence! We need to get out of here now….” The man stopped running, and looked down to find a kunai stuck in his chest, and fell to the ground. Then kunai started to fly toward the Hokage.
The Hokage yelled, “Get Down!”
Two kunai hit two men beside the Hokage and fell beside him.
The Hokage sat there with drop of sweat crawling down his face. Shit!!, he thought. “Tell all the men to retreat from their posts and come to the basement,” he ordered.
“Yes Sir!” and the shinobi jumped out of sight.
The Hokage turned to his men, “Listen Up! The enemy is getting closer and closer to defeating our last defence! But, we’re not going to let them! Do you understand?!”
“YES SIR!”
“OK follow me….” He said and the ground began to shake.
“Hurry, let’s go!” The Hokage ordered, but he saw one of his men trembling with fear. “What’s wrong, Nikuchi? Come on let’s go, don’t’ be afraid at this time,” the Hokage said putting his arm over Nikuchi’s shoulder and ran to the Hokage office building.

All the noise of the battle mended. Only the wind howled through the ashes of the fires and the clothes of dead bodies.
Two men were standing on the overhang, looking down on all of Konoha. All the buildings were wiped out and the Hokage tower which used to stand tall was now collapsed to the ground. The faces of the 5 Hokage were wiped clean from the mountain. The hidden village was now exposed and destroyed.
“Look at the sky Neko-san.” One of the men said.
“Yeah, a lot of blood has been spilt tonight... cough* cough*”
“Are you ok Neko-san?”
The man closed his eyes, the hood of his cloak shadowed his face, “I’m fine.” And he looked at the crimson sky reflecting down on the man who destroyed the strongest and peaceful homeland ever known in shinobi history.

Chapter 1
2 years later.

The soft path of the forest cushioned the head owned by a man. He wore a navy blue t-shirt with a katana attached to a band, wrapped around his shoulder. The man drooled all over nature’s surroundings. He lay there shaking with hunger and clenched the earth’s soil crushing the chunks of dirt into specks of dust.
He thought in his head with rage, “that dirty whore! She took all my damn food and money last night! I’m gonna cut her f***ing throat and then eat her head and….” And his mind drifted off to thoughts of warm red bean cakes and buttered squid.
His eyes wandered blurrily around the forest, and on the ground he saw a….
“A MUSHROOM!” he squealed with joy and started crawling towards the mushroom. For a second there he thought he saw a man take the mushroom from it’s place. Then his thoughts turned into reality.
”MUSHROOM! MINE! MY FOOD!” said the starving man who was reaching for his katana to cut up the bastard who took his mushroom. But his bones were weak and tired from hunger.
”What?” The person who took his mushroom said. “You were going to eat this mushroom?”
The sword wielder looked up and barked, “YEA BUT YOU TOOK IT YOU BASTARD!” and his saliva flew onto the man’s feet.
Ignoring it the man laughed, “hahaha! You must be joking! These mushrooms are poisonous, and I am the one responsible to get rid of these.”
The starving man on the ground’s eyes were wide open.
The man smiled, “you can come over to my house if you’d like to have dinner.”
The famished man, not looking so famished, stood on his knees and made puppy eyes with his two hands clenched into one fist, with an adorable smile, “THANK YOU!”

“So what makes you come here so far into the East side of the country?” The man asked the stranger serving some Miso soup.
The famished man staring at the soup said, “I am looking for someone.”
“oh is that so,” said the man who saved him, “where do you come from?”
The stranger said with his mouth full of rice and beef, “ Aye Do NO…..”
“Please eat first, then talk,” chuckled the man

“Reishin.”
“oh that’s a nice name,” said the man. “My name is Hizuki.”
“thank you for saving me from that mushroom.”
“No problem, Just glad I was there in time.” Hizuki smiled.
“So Reishin,” Hisuki said, “Who is the person you are searching for?”
Reishin looked at the fireplace feeling the flames warm his face, “He’s my brother.”
“Why are you looking for him?” Hisuki asked.
Reishin just stared at the fire and his mouth turned into a frown, and he closed his eyes shut.
Hisuki apologized, “I’m so sorry for asking, please forgive me.”
Reishin smiled, “it’s alright.”
There was a long silence between the two men, only the wind blowing through the small crack the window and the crackling of the fire was heard.
“So what exactly do you do?” asked Hizuki.
“I’m a shinobi.” Said Reishin.
Hizuki with his hand supporting his chin just nodded his head, “I see….”
Reishin looked confused and was wondering, “how long am I supposed to stay here.”
Hizuki said, “Well since I saved you from the deadly mushroom, How about showing some of your amazing jutsus. If you do I will also let you sleep here tonight.”
Reishin stood up, “Okay!” and he put his hands out and did a seal, “Transformation no jutsu.” And his appearance was exactly the same as Hizuki’s.
Hizuki’s face looked the same, “ I’ve already seen the simple techniques, Do you mind showing some of your advanced jutsus.”
Reishin went back to his original form and looked at Hizuki with a puzzled look, but said, “alright.”
The shinobi did a bunch of seals quickly and said, “ Earth replication technique!” and Replications of Reishin appeared around the fireplace.
Hizuki’s was pleased, “that’s so cool. You don’t mind in doing more, do you?” and Reishin started to do some seals and said, “Dragon Palm no jutsu!”
After doing more and more jutsus Reishin became tired.
“Oh I’m so sorry for wearing you out after your long journey. Here please drink this.” Said Hizuki carrying a cup of tea.
“Thank you.” And Reishin grabbed the cup with his two hands and started to drink. All of a sudden his head started to hurt. He dropped the cup and the tea spilled all over the floor.
”What? What in the world?” He thought and his vision started to blur and he saw Hizuki standing over him…….

His vision came back and started to look around, “Ah where am I? where the hell am…”
He was in a rather large room with large computers and a satellite looking dish and saw Hizuki standing in front of him.
”Hizuki, why are you doing this?” Remembering the cup of tea he was given.
Hizuki gave an evil smile to Reishin, “When you see a poisonous mushroom, you're supposed to avoid it. Instead you put your eyes on it and was attracted to it. That was the wrong thing to do. Your power seems rather strong, I’m going to obtain your power to use it against the people of that corrupted city who destroyed my life.”
"What?"
Hizuki looked at the ground. "I must get back everything i lost."
"How are you going to obtain my power? That's impossible," said Reishin.
Hizuki stared at Reishin, "this sattelite looking thing can absorb all the chakra stored in you. I stole it from the military when they were passing through, and luckily they didn't notice. But now I'm going to take all of your chakra now, so don't even try to escape. it's impossible."
Then that’s when Reishin noticed. He tried to move but couldn’t budge. He was on a rock hard bed and was wrapped around with chains.
Hizuki laughed, “Ha Ha Ha! You have no power to even remove those weak chains.”
Reishin said in his head, “all my chakra is gone from doing all those jutsus, crap!”
The evil man laughed, “ Don’t worry, the pain will soon be relieved after you die.”
Reishin looked at Hizuki, "Why are you doing this for your own good? Why do you...."
Hizuki barked back, "There's no point in changing my decision now! I already started the 1st step of the process of eating away your power!"
The laser looking thing started to glow with a blue aura and chakra started to absorb from Reishin.
Hizuki laughed, "Hahaha, in the next few seconds your power shall be mine!"
Reishin lay there closing his eyes, thinking in his small little mind, “I can’t let him do this. There is no point in living in this world if I die now. I have no home. I have no family left. Except for that one man. I have to see that person still. I have…..TO FIND HIM!”
His eyelids opened with dark blue pupils raging with fury out of them. He yelled, “KAGE BUNSHIN NO JUTSU!”
A surprise look appeared on HIzuki’s face, “What!?!? THAT”S IMPOSSIBLE! He didn’t do any seals! What’s the meaning of this?”
Replications started to appear in the room.
Reishin and his kage bunshins smiled, “Bastard...I won’t die just yet.”

Chapter 2


R adiant illumination of the city shone bright in the night sky, showing the evidence the red pollution that man produced and poisoned by shining the bright lights. Anyways, two miles away from the city, stood an ordinary house on a treeless field. During the years of driving down the road and looking at the house from about, while looking at the sunset sky, people believed that the house was abandoned for years and years, and was rumoured haunted. The rumour of a lunatic who was banished from the city borders of an unknown reason settled there creating experiments on planning revenge on the city. Little children who play on swings and battle with digimon cards, theorized this, and their parents who are doctors, and lawyers, told that the children were ridiculous. Those parents are now changed people and the night sky that people used to see in the past, now shines, not with bright lights from the city, but the lights of glimmering, beautiful stars aligned in complex constellations. It was believed that these wonderful presents that were given to them were from a man who wore a navy blue t-shirt with a katana attached to a band, wrapped around his shoulder.



“REPLICATION NO JUTSU!!!”
Multiple bodies stood in the room surrounding Hizuki.
Hizuki with a surprised look said, “How…. How did you do that?”
The man on the stone bed was now sitting up, released from the chains by his replication.
“You didn’t even perform a seal…. How in the hell did you use such an advanced technique without any seals. And… and I even took all your chakra away from you.”
Reishin stood up beside the table and looked at Hizuki in the eyes.
“This is a curse that was passed down by my family all the way down to me. This isn’t like any other curse…. This is a bloodline limit.” Reishin’s eyes leaked with a black aura and his body emitted a blue mist of chakra.
Hizuki terrified of his frightening appearance barely spoke, “you’re….ch-chakra.. is evil.”
Reishin didn’t converse. His chakra started to calm down and his eyes returned to normal.
“Why did you try to take my power?” Reishin asked.
The man on the chair put his hands on his face and started to sob.
Reishin stood there still in front of the presence of the lamenting man.
“It started….*sob*… when I was living in the city. *sob* My wife and kid…. And I *sob* were living in a house where we use only fire and water from a well. Also the pollution that the people produced contaminated the water and the air we lived in, since we lived beside a heavily polluted factory. Well… *sob* my wife and child eventually got sick from these living conditions.”
The shinobi grabbed his katana from the wall and put the band around his shoulder.
Hizuki continued, “I went to the health minister and complained about these living conditions. But instead of helping us, they confiscated all our belongings and our home from us, because we were not supposed to live there!”
Reishin sat down on the stone bed and his replications disappeared and listend to Hizuki.
“My family ended up with some money given by the government and we ultimately ended up living in the corrupted streets of that were contaminated. Then finally my wife and child died and that’s when I ended up here. In this house ending up crazy.”
There was a short pause between the two men.
Hizuki started to cry more, “It’s like watching my family die! They didn’t deserve it! They were good people! Good wife! Smart and loving son! That is why! That is why I need to take revenge! Avenge my family’s death!”
Reishin spoke, “Well what if you took my powers. What if you couldn’t even make it pass the steps of the government building? They are heavily guarded with men that could easily defeat you. You would gain nothing from it! I know!”
“WHAT DO YOU KNOW ABOUT ME?! I COULDN’T JUST STAND THERE AND WATCH MY FAMILY DIE! I HAD TO DO SOMETHING ABOUT IT. BUT THE SONS OF BITCHES JUST LET THEM ROT IN THE SEWER! WHAT DO YOU KNOW ABOUT FAMILY!” screamed Hizuki who was sobbing on the ground.
Reishin just stared at the wall. He thought, ‘Did… did they end up like this too? How did my family die…’
His thoughts interrupted again by Hizuki who said, “That is why! That is why I am going to gain strength and overpower those who overpowered against me!!!”
Hizuki took out a remote control and pressed a button.
The satellite dish in the room beamed at the stone bed which Reishin was sitting on and it zapped Reishin whose body was covered with a dark blue aura.
Hizuki started to smile, still with tears in his eyes. Then his smile disappeared.
Reishin’s body wasn’t there, instead a log was in his place.
“don’t move.” A sharp edge was at Hizuki’s neck. Reishin held his katana to Hizuki’s neck.
Hizuki smiled again, “I’m sorry, but I have to do this.” His finger pressed the button on the remote.
Reishin’s eyes widened and heard the shaft coming from behind him. The ray of light shone the room and the beam started to lengthen. The shinobi quickly leaped to the side and the beam of light impacted with Hizuki.
The dark blue aura covered Hizuki’s body and he died during the process.
Reishin looked at Hizuki’s dead body. Then he walked to the door and paused. He looked back, and opened the door and hastened out of the house.
Half of the sky was dark red, and half of it was dark blue. A tale was said that the demon ninetales that was sealed in the ‘legendary ninja’ had both red and blue chakra. Reishin heard from the tale that the two chakras could never combine into one. Instead the legendary ninja had to get rid of the evil chakra. He looked at the sky again and thought, ‘like ‘him’ I will use my power to destroy that red sky, and bring life to the people in poverty like Hizuki. And when that happens, I will become famous for my work, and eventually my brother will come out to get me, instead of me finding him. Since Hizuki was killed, I will relive Hizuki’s life and complete the dream that was never accomplished. I will use that fire and water he used to survive and use it against the power of the government. I will bring back that blue sky to this world. I will fight for what is right.’
Reishin put his hand in the air with his fingers spread apart. Then he clenched his fist grabbing the sky with him, he put his arm down and started to head down to the city, unexpected of the journey that awaits him.

Chapter 3

In a dark cave where the most depraved group of ninjas used to assemble was now in rubbles. The terrorist group, Akatsuki have been exiled from the cave and members have scattered. Some of them survived by themselves but some of them were caught by the feudal lord’s highly trained ninjas and they were executed. It is still a mystery in how many members remain in the group, but evidence proves that all of the demons that they tried to attain were not extracted. The jinchuuriki still wander in the world, in hidden villages protected by each of the kages. However one of them disappeared from human existence. People search for the jinchuuriki to this day, not the Akatsuki, but friends who devoted themselves to find him.
The one jinchuuriki who fought for friends, optimism, and peace. The one man who once held the power of the kyuubi.
The one man who had a dream since he was a little boy.

The smoke filled air was inhaled by the lungs of a young man with a blue navy shirt and a katana attached to a band, wrapped around his shoulder. He coughed and wheezed through the filthy air and continued walking into the city.
“What is this place?”
People were lying on the grounds wrapped in newspapers to warm themselves and some were eating dust coated bread with water that probably tasted like fingernails.
Reishin thought to himself, ‘this is… terrible.’
He walked some more and heard laughing in the alleyway. He looked to see who it was, and there were a group of men having a smoke.
Now, Reishin was a country boy so he never seen a rolled up doobie before, and he thought that the source of the dust and smoke was because of these group of thugs.
Reishin called out, “Hey! Stop that!”
The group of men looked at him and one of them, most likely the leader, said, “nani?”
Reishin repeated, “I said put that out.” He was calm and stayed confident against these thugs. He didn’t know their power, so he stood guard for any attack.
The leader had an afro covered in dust with a smoke between his two fingers. He started walking towards Reishin and started laughing.
“Ha ha ha ha ha ha. Look here, Do you even know who you’re messing with? We run THIS joint, and da whole block bro, and if you think you’re gonna mess wit us, then I think you should think again mate.” and threw his cigarette at Reishin’s face, and the ashes burned into Reishin’s pores.
As the cigarette fell to the ground, Reishin used his foot to grab the cigarette, then with a swift kick, he swung his foot up and kicked the leader under the chin with the burning cigarette in between. The thug flew back two meters and fell on the ground with a burnt chin and a broken jaw.
One of the group members looked at the leader who was unconscious, “Lookee what he done to da boss!”
“yeah.” One guy said really dizzily, probably because he was toked up to the max. “They f***ing wit us!”
“Dood man! They is only one!”
“Dood, f*** I’m f***ing blazed Stuey, what ya expect me to say, when I’m blazed!”
Then the two thugs started to charge at Reishin. Reishin thought, ‘damn I think they might already be in some kind of genjutsu (after studying their awkward movements and the colour of their eyes), what is wrong with their language too? Someone must be behind this, and I’m gonna find out.’
Reishin did a seal and said, “Dispel Genjutsu!” But the men continued to charge at Reishin.
Reishin’s eyes widened. ‘What!? They must be under some kind of advanced genjutsu, might just use the old fashioned way.’
Reishin closed his eyes and one of the druggies attempted a punch at Reishin’s face. With a quick dodge, Reishin did a back flip landing on one hand and kicked the one of the thugs in the face. The stoner flew back into the other men and they all collapsed onto the ground.
“Dammnit man, let’s get outta here! This guy is on steroids!” said one of the thugs and they picked up the boss and ran away.
Reishin smiled, “that’ll teach them.” He turned around, but he heard a man call out from behind,
”HEY D***HEAD!!! You MeSSIN WIT MY CREW?!”
Reishin turned around with a smug smile and thought, ‘man these guys want to get beat agai….’ But when he turned around, he saw hundreds of men with weapons, (such as bats, swords, scythes,) crowding around in the alleyways. (alleyway is big)
“Sh** your pants mate?” one of the men smiled, “Well I guess we can take care of dat for ya?”
The hordes of men started to walk towards Reishin. The lone shinobi took a step back, and the men started to quicken their pace, and when they were only a few meters away from him, Reishin grabbed and pulled out his katana and put it in front of him and with one hand he did a seal and said, “Dance of the Frozen throne!”
The other leader put his arm back and the group of men stopped running. The tip of Reishin’s blade was blooming with beautiful crystalline ice. Then he threw the blade down and breaking the concrete with the tip of the blade and a thick icicle wall summoned from the ground, between Reishin and the thugs separating them apart.
“I will finish them with this one last move,” the lone shinobi said.
However when he attempted in doing his first seal, he stopped. He resisted, not that he wanted to, but because something was holding him back.
“I wouldn’t do that if I were you,” said an unknown voice behind him.
Reishin’s eyes grew wide, ‘how come I didn’t sense his chakra?” he asked himself
Reishin struggled to see who was behind him, his head cock to the side and saw a shadow of a young man.
The man with the same smug smile that Reishin had before said, “Hm.. you can move during my jutsu? How troublesome….” ….


Chapter 4



A glimpse of the sun gleamed and scorched his eyes. Tears could not even come out, due to the hot and arid air. The tears came out finally when the sweat on his forehead fell into the blinking eyes of the boy. He closed his eyes shut and blinked the drops of sweat out of his eye.
The heavy air thwarted the little boy in going on any further, and also the famine in him began to kick in. Falling to his knees, he had a delusion of the roast peasant, and deep fried dumplings, that he had the day before. Breathing heavily, he thought of the waterfall streaming with glistening and soft flowing water, he had seen a couple of weeks ago. And then all of a sudden he heard:

“Hey Kid! Get off the road!”
The boy looked up to see who it was, but almost lost his conscious, he succeeded and saw a young man with a huge scar across his nose, and woman with black hair, most likely a couple, riding a cart leaded by a donkey.

“Oh honey! The boy looks as if he’s going to die. What should we do?”

“Nah his family is probably waiting for him somewhere, so let him be.”

“Well we should help this young man anyway, and bring him to our house and let him have some food. He looks like he’s going to die any second,” the wife said.

“ARGH! We already have people to feed! The horses, cows and pigs! That should be enough…”

*SLAP*, “You Baka….” But she stopped and saw the famished boy, not looking so famished, stood on his knees and made puppy eyes with his two hands clenched into one fist, with an adorable smile, “THANK YOU!”

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“I can’t believe you brought that boy here, now we are going to waste all our food!”

“Ah, you baka, why can’t you feel innocent for this young one, he might be looking for his family and we can help him find them, and when he’s with them, your dream will finally come true, OK?” she said, and smiled at the young boy, “what’s your name?”
The boy devouring the fried chicken and the rice from the bowl, looked up with his mouth full, “I don hab won.”

“huh? Didn’t your mother give you one?”

“No I don’t know my modder”

The woman frowned, “Son, do you have a family?”

The boy looked up, “no.”

The husband in the other room, heard the whole conversation finally said, “SO MUCH FOR MY DREAM!”

The wife ignored her husband and said, “I guess you’ll have to stay with us a little longer,” and she smiled and patted the boy on the head. The boy giggled and grabbed the last chicken bone, taking a bite out of every last piece hanging on the bone.
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The fireplace crackled in the living room and the flames shadows danced in the room. The woman came into the room and sat on the chair across from her husband on the other side of the small room.

“Where’s the boy?” the man asked.

“Oh, so you’re worrying about him? That’s a surprise.”

“ahhhhhh nevermind,” said the arrogant man who continued to sit there.
His wife looked at the fire, “he’s outside sitting with the animals. I think you should talk to him. You know, just have one of those…”
“Father and son talks?” her husband interrupted, “He’s not my son.”

“But you can…”

The man stood from his chair. “I’m not gonna take that stray to be my son.”

“I didn’t say he should be your son, I was trying to say to take the role of a father and show an example for the boy, so he can experience what a family is like…”

“NO!” he exclaimed, “for the last time, I won’t, I just can’t.”

His wife stood up now and shouted back, “Why? It’s a simple task, that all grown men can do for any boy. You love kids, why not this one?”

Her husband continued to stand there, “His… his eyes. He….he just….looks so much like him,” and the man walked out of the room.
The wife sat and slouched in the couch and watched the dancing flames die out into the glowing wood.
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The next morning was a pleasant, with birds out early again, singing to the others and to the farm animals in the animal pen.
The boy was sitting on the porch of the house with a stick in his hand. He threw it over the fence into the animal pen, and heard an, “OUCH!”
The boy was surprised and he stood up and saw the husband come out to beat the living hell out of the person who threw the stick.

“Who the *&%* was tha….? Oh, it was you,” the man said.

The timid boy had a fake smile on his face and pretended to laugh trying to get out of the situation, “heh heh… sorry.”
The scarred man who wasn’t so mad anymore, looked at the boy and examined him, and thought ‘he just looks so much like him.’

“What’s your name boy?” he asked.

“I don’t have one,” the boy said.

“eh, then I’ll just call you Reishin for now,” said the husband said arrogantly. The both stood there with nothing to say. ~~~~~awkward silence~~~~~~~

“So,” the man interrupted, “do you…um…remember where you came from?”

“no,” came the reply.

“Oh, well…,” he just scratched his head and rubbed the huge scar on his nose. He started to fiddle with the knife in his hand, and the boy looked up with wide opened eyes and ran to the man and stared at the knife with awe, “Is That A Kunai?”

The husband was surprised but also laughed, and said, “Yeah, I… I used to be a ninja.”

The boy was even more surprised than the man, “A NINJA? That’s so cool!”

The man laughed, “haha you think so?”

The child played with the heavy knife and asked, “do you think you can teach me?”

Confused the man asked, “teach you?”

“Teach me become a ninja.”

There was no answer. The man looked at the ground and said, “I’m sorry, that’s the only thing I can’t do…”

The boy said with a frown, “but I thought you were a ninja…”

“Look kid, I don’t really want to go teaching something that I don’t want to, and I quit teaching about 4 years ago..”

He looked at the boy’s eyes and they started to water.
“I want to be a ninja. It’s my dream,” the boy said.

Dream? Dream? Where did the man hear this from before?
The man kneeled down and looked up at the boy’s face, “Becoming a ninja is a very dangerous thing for a boy like you, I’ve seen many faces disappear and die in my life and they all are recognized as heroes. And heroes make sacrifices for other people to survive, and…I don’t want you doing that. That will just make your friends sad. I don’t want a little boy growing up with a dangerous dream. It’s too dangerous to risk another life.”
“But… but you were going to leave me on the road?”
The scarred man said, “ well I thought…. Nevermind.”

The sky started to become a crimson red and the sun faded in the horizon.
The man looked at the boy’s red glowing face and said , “well…. Tell you what. I will make you a deal, I will train you for one day, and we’ll see what happens, whether if you can become a shinobi or not.”
The young boy looked up with a big smile, “Really?”

The young man also smiled, “Yeah.” Then his smile faded away and stood up and started to speak in that same arrogant voice from the day before. “BUT! From now on you will do whatever I say, and will work your hardest no matter what? Do I make myself clear?”
The boy stood tall with his hands on the side, “Yes sir,” he said half assedly.
“I can’t hear you!”
“YESSIR!”
“That’s better.”
And the man walked on the porch and opened the door of the house. He turned around and said, “Oh and Reishin, I forgot. From now on, call me Iruka Sensei.”

Canthinkofaname
06-04-2006, 04:59 AM
that was great! i like that and alot of your other fics
btw i think you have made the most fics ever

AK47
06-04-2006, 05:01 AM
this is the one i really want to continue on.
cuz i think i have a good story coming on here
plz tell everyone to comment here

2Pac
06-04-2006, 05:02 AM
good job man, you should continue on.

AK47
06-04-2006, 03:18 PM
more people comment please

KageNaruto
06-04-2006, 06:29 PM
nice start you got there AK, and yeah you do write a ton of fics. just wondering, the characters of naruto will or wont tie into this fic?

p.s. thanks for giving a comment on my new fic as well

AK47
06-04-2006, 09:04 PM
nice start you got there AK, and yeah you do write a ton of fics. just wondering, the characters of naruto will or wont tie into this fic?

p.s. thanks for giving a comment on my new fic as well
i didn't want to spoil but yea the characters of naruto will come in later
but Reishin is one of my main characters, i don't konw why i called him that, couldn't think of a name.
since the village of konoha is destroyed, we would assume that many ninja escaped and scattered.

ps. no problem :wink:

AK47
06-05-2006, 12:57 AM
*edited *
chap 2 in first post

Canthinkofaname
06-05-2006, 01:07 AM
mmmm that was good i liked it and it was a good story

KageNaruto
06-05-2006, 01:36 AM
nice, nice! keep up the good work AK.

in the next hour or two i should post the rest of chapter 1 of my fanfiction too, check it out (when its updated)

AK47
06-05-2006, 01:40 AM
alright thanx! :)

Canthinkofaname
06-05-2006, 01:56 AM
hey by the way, how to you edit the titles? do you get a mod to do it or what

AK47
06-05-2006, 02:00 AM
no just edit your first post

narutoIZZAbest
06-06-2006, 10:01 PM
wow, hehe talk about good cliffhangers ^__^

love it :D

KageNaruto
06-06-2006, 10:51 PM
hey narutoIZZAbest check out my fic too (Blood-Stained Kubikiri), its only like a few threads below this

AK47
06-07-2006, 03:09 AM
THANX Y'ALLS

Canthinkofaname
06-07-2006, 04:12 AM
WEEEEEEE good, and im assuming the guy binding reishin (what ever) is shikamaru? or some other nara person (i think its shika)
and why did you do the story and then go to the piece of crap about neji?

AK47
06-07-2006, 08:02 PM
i agree with you
i might even rewrite the whole chap
i don't like my story right now even

Lost Prophet
06-08-2006, 12:22 PM
WOW, Im reading all three for the first time today, and lemme tell yah, these are great. You really have talent when it comes to fanfics. lets see.....

hinata love story, this, psycho fever, chouji and naruto go to leaf castle, etc. damn, keep it up.



(will the hinata one ever be continued?)

AK47
06-08-2006, 07:28 PM
thanx man, got to do somethnig to have these forums up and running, not is the SOS section only active, got to have some fun in other sections too...
and for the hinata story, i dunno, if i have some good ideas, and my day is good, maybe

regina777
06-12-2006, 09:55 AM
Nice job- keep it up.

AK47
06-12-2006, 09:30 PM
thank you new reader :D

WalkingFish
06-12-2006, 10:10 PM
awsoem dude what was he talking abvout with the story about Neji but whatever its great but i released the new chapter of my story too i think its gonna finish out on the next few chaps

Canthinkofaname
06-12-2006, 10:16 PM
ak edited it before you read it. there was a part about neji getting killed

KageNaruto
06-12-2006, 10:43 PM
nice AK, i finally started on my chapter 2....... i hope to comeplete writing it in 3 days or so, thats my prediction. hey maybe when you write this fic between new paragraphs can you skip a space? it might make it a bit easier to read

AK47
06-12-2006, 11:17 PM
Yeah i'll do that.. New chap anyways
wrong time to do flashback but w/e it's my story XD

well comment then please
chapter 3&4 in first post

Canthinkofaname
06-12-2006, 11:31 PM
iruka? i thought his scar was across his nose.
either way, that was a good story

AK47
06-12-2006, 11:37 PM
sHIT!!!!!
thanx for correcting me.....AGAIN :(

WalkingFish
06-13-2006, 01:31 AM
lol what did you say it was over his eye lol i love flash back kinda things

Lost Prophet
06-13-2006, 09:19 PM
that couldve been your prologue, ak. it was pretty good......but iruka, with a woman? not fantasizing over naruto? IMPOSSIBLE!

WalkingFish
06-13-2006, 09:40 PM
hey shut up abotu Iruka hes the most pimpin ninja in konoha

and LP my Sad story has a new chapter

AK47
06-14-2006, 02:33 AM
that couldve been your prologue, ak. it was pretty good......but iruka, with a woman? not fantasizing over naruto? IMPOSSIBLE!
well iruka is married, and everyone eventually marries
this is not my prologue, this is a flash back
thanx for the comments everyone

Lost Prophet
06-14-2006, 05:05 PM
hey shut up abotu Iruka hes the most pimpin ninja in konoha

and LP my Sad story has a new chapter

damn, please tell me theres no tragedy please!

AK47
06-17-2006, 02:39 AM
chap 5 deleted

Canthinkofaname
06-17-2006, 08:44 PM
nice. thats a great fic. and have you noticed that im always the first person to comment on your chapters

Hellchild915
06-17-2006, 09:20 PM
Good fan fic nicely written