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Abscon
04-14-2006, 04:10 PM
Ok-- this is like my first fanfic.. hope you like it..

Please reveiw.. All reviews are good :wink:
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Chapter one: Love at first sight.

It was sunset. The red rays of the dying remains of the day shone over the mountain tops, elongating the shadows, and making a dancing reflection on the lake, so you couldn’t look at it for its brightness. The world was bright orange, as the last of the sun went behind the mountain. Soon all that was left was a dying crescent. The birds sang from the trees, as they settled down for the night. In the distance, you could hear the odd owl, waking up for there nighttime feast.

Yondaime sighed, as the sun disappeared behind the hills. Another beautiful sunset in the country he loved with all his heart. And times like these reminded him why he loved it. As the birds gradually stopped singing, he set off again down the dusty path.

As he watched the fading light, he thought about the village. Rumors among the jounin had it that the Third was looking for an heir, since he himself had given up on children. The jounins had not been directly informed that the job of Hokage was available, but information traveled fast... If you had the right connections.

Yondaime sighed, as he walked along the path.

He wanted to become Hokage. That had always been his dream. He loved Konoha above his own life, and would willingly give his life to protect it. That was the job of the Hokage: To protect the and take care of the village. To be a father for the village, and everybody in it.

But...

He didn’t know if he could. It was a large part to fulfill. He didn’t think he could handle it, being like a father to everyone. He was sure he could never live up to the previous, or present Hokage.

He sighed again. He listened to the last of the birds. They were free. No obligations. No...
One of the birds fluttered to the end of the branch.
"Hey there little guy", He said casually. It gave him a little nibble on the finger, and flew off. Yondaime chuckled to himself.


He loved his village. But how ever much he wanted to protect it, he knew he couldn’t stay all the time. He needed to travel. He was never one to stay still. He loved being a jounin. It was perfect for him. Lots of action, and lots of travel. He got to see things like that beautiful sunsets every day. But however beautiful it was, he didn’t want to see the same sunset twice.

It was getting dark. The birds song had stopped, and the owls started hooting. The forest seemed to be more... alive. He was walking along, scouting for camp sites, when a building suddenly loomed out at him from the darkness. He was kind of surprised, since it was a small road, but relived none the less.

He hadn’t had real food in days. The stuff in his pack was dry and stale, and he had started rationing the Ramen cups.

He looked at the building. It was built in the traditional style of the fire country. It was two floors high, and was made from dark wood panels. It had two balconies on the second floor, and the roof was arched, and made of red tiles. The windows showed flickering, and inviting light A blue sign sticking out from the side told him that it was an inn. Yondaime was tired. He had fought two battles today, and walked a great deal. Not seeing any decent campsites in the immediate vicinity, he decided to stay here for the night.

The door of the inn was flanked by a small set of stairs, leading up to a porch. The door was oak, and had a large, round handle set into the middle. He shook some of the dust off his feet, and stepped inside.

It was fairly dark inside. The lights were weak, and flickering. About three or four tables surrounded the bar, where a bald man was wiping the counter. A few guests were sitting on stools, drinking. The interior was done entirely in wood. Pillars were placed around the room, and tables were scattered here and there. A few people sat at these tables.

Looking around, Yondaime cracked a grin. It’s been a while.

He went up to the bar, and stood there, waiting patiently. The bartender looked up, irritated, as though he had disturbed him in doing something important. "Whaddya want?" he growled, more then said. Yondaime stayed calm, as he answered: "Dinner, and a place to sleep please."

The bartender looked as though his politeness annoyed him. Giving him a quizzical look, he thrust a grubby menu over to him. He then proceeded with the wiping. Yondaime, now a bit annoyed, went over and took a table. As he looked through the menu, he looked around at the other guests. At a table in the corner, a hooded man (or woman, he couldn’t tell) sat smoking. Looking behind him, a younger boy sat eating.

Then he saw her.

He could barely believe he hadn’t seen her before. Now that he could see her, it was as if her beauty lit up the whole inn. She was a young woman, of about twenty-five. Her hair fell gracefully a bit past her shoulders, curling here and there. Her bangs were just out of her eyes. What eyes. Blue as the endless ocean, making a beautiful contrast on her lips, red as a setting sun. Only more pretty. She was wearing a grubby cloak, with a big hood, which was hanging down her back.

Yondaime had never had time for love.

All his life he had worked to become the best. He trained as much as he could, and spent more time with himself then he should have. He had heard of love. But never of love at first sight.

Never the less. That’s what he experienced at that very moment. He couldn’t take his eyes off her. She’s so...
He just sat there, watching her eat. He was entranced by her beauty, and fascinated by the grace of her movements, like a beautiful dance. He allowed his head to sink into his hand, and just sat, brushing his spiky hair out of his eyes.

As though she sensed his stare on her, she looked over at him. He turned away quickly, trying to look casual. He blushed. Luckily the inn was dark enough to hide it.

What??

Yondaime had only blushed on one occasion in his life.

What was going on?

He had forgotten about dinner. He looked back at the woman. She was now eating dinner. A roast steak. He looked back at her, only to meet her eyes, looking up at him. He smiled, and she smiled back.

He was sure he felt his heart skip a beat.

He was shocked when she promptly got up, waved her hair back, and set of towards his table. He suddenly tried to seem very interested in the menu.

She came over to his table, gliding gracefully across the floor. She stopped by his table. He looked up. She was prettier up close.

“Hello”, she said softly, looking at him.

He was trying to think of something to say. When he couldn’t, he just answered “Hello”, quietly.
They stared at each other. Yandoime could think of nothing to say, so he was relieved when she broke the silence. “May I sit down?” she asked nicely.

“Sure,” he answered. Yes!

From there on it all flowed. They started talking. They talked about lots of things. She wondered if he was a shinobi. “Yes” he said proudly. She just smiled.

They talked late in to the night. After he finished his dinner, they both ordered drinks from the barman (Who was still wiping the table).
Slowly the inn started to empty. People left, and soon they were the only ones left, talking in the flickering light.

She could hear him getting excited.

After the drinks, they went upstairs.

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When he woke up a few hours later, he was alone in bed. A ray of sun cut through the curtains, and fell on his face. He squinted around the room, but didn’t see anyone. He lay his head on the pillow, and tried to sleep again. When he couldn’t, he got up.

It was a small room, with a bed, bathroom, and a oak dresser in the corner. A few pictures were hung on the wall. A glass door led out to the balcony. He was surprised at not seeing anyone, but he decided that she must have gone down for breakfast. He got up, and looked at the dresser top. He felt his breath catch in his throat.

All of his things were gone!

“Damn it”, he cried. He cursed himself at being so stupid. Even his clothes were gone. For a minute he had actually thought that she…

That bitch

He threw himself back onto his bed, and started to cry.

Looking around, he noticed a note on his bedside table. He stared at it.

I'm sorry

regina777
04-14-2006, 07:41 PM
i am reading this. This is good. quite good .
i hope you intend to add more?

Chidongan
04-14-2006, 08:34 PM
hahaha oh god! Yondaime cried. that bitch!! im gonna kill her. she really does sound beautiful tho. you have a great talent. you make her sound beautiful to a person by barely describing her its through Yondaime's actions that we know that she is beautiful. very descriptive i like it alot. please continue.

Hellchild915
04-14-2006, 10:29 PM
That was good, I would read was more if you put it up

Jasper
04-14-2006, 10:39 PM
its very good but the whole crying thing, i dunno i mean it doesnt seem like something a highly trained shinobi would do just cause he got jacked. but all that aside ITS AWESOME KEEP WRITING.

Abscon
04-15-2006, 05:22 AM
He may look though on the outside... but on the inside...Guess he was in love:P

Or maby he is crying becouse he got ripped off... i mean thats not somthing that should happen to a jounin :oops:

Im soon done with chapter two... ill probably have it finished in a day or two...
Glad you liked it :D

regina777
04-15-2006, 07:56 PM
we should be more thankful you wrote it- it was quite good. i guess i said that already. so i am hoping for a better or similar one in chapter 2

Abscon
04-15-2006, 08:01 PM
Surprise.. I got it finished today :) (allthough i'd still like to make some changes.. not many though.)

Disclaimer:I do not own Naruto. dont kill me

Please reveiw... All reveiws are good I reccomend reading this as I wrote it...With sadness and sorrow (piano theme, download here:http://savefile.com/files.php?fid=6793493) on repeat

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Chapter 2: The boy of sound and lightning.¨

The rain pounded hard on the roofs of the village. The clattering of the rain on the reinforced metal roofs sounded like hundreds of drummers, far away. A darkness consumed the village, specked here and there by the flickering lights of houses. Lightning flashed the sky, as always.

The hidden village of lightning had never been a big village. Because of poverty, they had always decided to rely on quality, and not quantity. Civil wars had ripped the village apart, killing hundreds of good men. The clans had revolted against the Raikage. The war had lasted for years, with the Raikage`s forces winning in the end.

A woman lay in a darkened room, breathing heavily. She lay on a mat on the floor of the room, which was lit by one candle. She could hear voices on the other side of the door, along with the crying of the newborn. A tear leaked from her eye. She wouldn’t be able to see her son’s life.

She had always thought about having children. She had dreamt of teaching it to walk, to talk. To do the whole mother thing. She would watch him grow, and learn. But now… It could never be…

All because of that fateful night. One look, one moment, that could change lives. Her son…His son…

The crowd assembled was dressed in black. A tragic silence hung over the crowd. Some people were crying. Others just looked blank; bottling up their emotions. Akira was one of them. Standing at the front, she frowned down on the body of her father. The fourth Raikage of the hidden village of lightning. She wasn’t really listening to the service. She just stared at her father.

Why...why did you have to die?

She remembered the day, when she was twelve. Her father and her were sitting on the dock, looking out over the sea. He looked at her, smiling.
“Akira… you will become a great shinobi. You have the sweetness to grace the world and the kindness to save it.” She just looked at him. Tears started brimming in her eyes. “Father…” she said, starting to cry. They hugged for longer then she could remember.

Her emotions started to flow over. Looking at her fathers body, tears started brimming in her eyes. She wiped them, trying to hide it, but it could not be helped. They just started flowing, turning into a unstoppable river. She stood there, crying.
She thought of the countless times her father had fought…For his country. For her. He was, truly: The Fourth Raikage.
She had always been worried that someday, he wouldn’t come back.

But the funeral was just tradition. The people didn’t care. They considered the fourth Raikage to be the worst ever. All because they found out…That he had had a bloodline limit.

Villagers hated people with advanced bloodlines. THEY were the ones who started this pointless war. Some even went as far as to accuse him of starting the war on purpose betraying everyone, The hate was widespread... and completely pointless. Suddenly, everybody hated that brat who was his daughter.

One month later, Antani Akira; daughter of the demon Raikage, was declared a missing nin.

Akira was shaken out of her thoughts, by the opening of the door. In the opening were two people. A middle aged woman, holding a newborn baby boy.

Tears started flowing down her face. Without a word, the woman placed the newborn in her arms. She looked down at her son, crying softly.

She pressed him softly to her face, and kissed him, holding him carefully in her protecting arms. Already, she could see that he had her eyes. Bright blue, like the sky.

“Grow strong,” she whispered softly, cradling her son. “You may never find your father. You may never know any family. But still…”. She cried harder.
“Don’t let the world break you. The world is cruel, and ugly sometimes. But..” The boy looked up at her. “You can change the world with your courage, and save it with your kindness.” She started sobbing, while holding her baby. They lay there, for what she wished could be forever.
Looking at him again, she started a little.

“You have his ears,” she whispered. She looked up at the woman, who was standing in a corner, trying to hold back her tears.
“His name is Kazemu.” She whispered lovingly.
“Hai,” said the woman in a choked voice. She looked back down at her son. “You have better ears then me…use them for good, like your grandfather,” she sobbed. “There are so many things I wish I could have done,” she whispered to him. “I wish I could be there…but I can’t. Be strong. You are the last child of sound and lighting.”

They lay there, locked in an tight embrace for a long time, Akira sobbing all the time.

The black clouds that always surrounded the village shifted. A single ray of light shone through the clouds, illuminating village. It went right in the window, and landed on Kazemu’s face. The room brightened, and glowed.
The lightning ceased, and all was silent, except for Akira’s muffled sobs.

It wasn’t meant to be. Pain shot through her body. Her heart was breaking.

She looked at her boy. “Good bye…Kazume. Become great,” she choked.
Looking at her boy, she closed her eyes.
Father… Here I come. I’m sorry…Kazemu.

She was dead.


The woman in the corner just stood there, tears streaking her face. She picked up Kazemu, and looked at him. What are we going to do with you?

She carried him out of the room, and lay him on a mat. She picked up a piece of paper, and began to write.

Dear Tom.

We got another one for the orphanage. His mother died in birth. Same old story. She never said who the father was. Please take care of him. His name is Kazemu. Come pick him up at five.

From Asahi.

Sighing, she looked at Kazemu. "I’m sorry"," she whispered.

Looking back at the inn, Akira sighed. The wallet she had taken felt like a weight in her hand. It was weighing down her heart. The sun had just started to rise over the hills. The sighed, and began to walk down the dusty path. She would hurry. The man was a shinobi, and he may catch up.

She hated herself.

How had it come to this? Ripping of travelers at inn? Stealing? It was no use to blame it on anyone else. She had done it. She was to blame. Her heart ached as she walked. He had been so kind to her. She wished that she could have stayed with him. Instead she stole his things?

I’m sorry father.

Tears started to brim in her eyes, but she wiped them away. The lightning police would be here soon. They had been tracking her for a while. She couldn’t get involved with anybody. That was her fate.

She thought exactly what she had written. She meant it to. He would never understand…Would he?

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Yondaime stared at the note, reading it again.

I’m sorry.

She damn well better be, he thought. As he lay there his sadness tuned into rage. Eventually he slipped back into grief. After laying there for a bit, he looked at the note again. Somehow, he now knew… That she meant every word of it. He remembered their conversation.

“yeah.. I’m sorry to,” he whispered.

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Did you cry? :( Kinda depressing chapter today. I think this is the best chapter so far,,kinda short though,,, Sorry :? ( I like writing depressing stuff... Dont expect a happy ending :roll: )

AK47
04-15-2006, 08:14 PM
very well written
give it two thumbs up

Drunken_Master_Rock_Lee
04-16-2006, 01:31 AM
seriously, you a born story-teller dude!

Abscon
04-16-2006, 01:30 PM
Ok.. hey guys.

I've just started writing chapter three. Ill probably have it out in a couple of days. Good you guys liked it... The reveiws keep me going :) ( I dont know about born storyteller though 8) ) Thanks you guys.

Just out of curiosity... how old do you think i am? Just wondering :wink:

Drunken_Master_Rock_Lee
04-16-2006, 01:32 PM
ok, if you asking that, it means you are young so i'll say....14, you are 14!

Chidongan
04-16-2006, 02:56 PM
very nice chapter. very descriptive. nice use of words. i like this one alot. im a little confused as to how Akira is alive still? didnt she die giving birth to her son? and now shes stealing yondaimes wallet.

and if you ask me i would say are around 15 or 16, but you writing ability far exceeds your age.

Abscon
04-16-2006, 03:02 PM
Hehe... Thanks guys. Im 13, actually...
But i turn 14 on Tuesday so.. 8) Thanks for all comments :!:

Chidongan: Maybe i should start labeling the flashbacks. :wink:

Abscon
05-13-2006, 04:53 PM
Ok guys.. After a looong time of pushing myself to just get it done, Here is and update:) Ill try to post more soon. Please reveiw.. All reveiws are good :wink: Enjoy!
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The sun was setting over Konoha, making the long shadows play over the houses and streets. The windows glittered in the fading sun, shimmering in the dust. The cliff face with the three Hokage’s on it towered over the village, watching over it. On top of the stone face of the first, a young man sat, deep in thought.

He looked down at his chest, checking all the scroll pouches on his new jounin uniform. He didn’t particularly like the green vest, or the tight fitting blue shirt. It felt weird on him. The vest was heavier than he was used to, and he had never had the need for a scroll pouch. He hadn’t really used them before.

He was a jounin.

He was still amazed that he had made it here. One hundred hopefuls and he was the second one who was 16. And he had made it. He was a jounin. He thought the only reason he made it was because of the jutsu he made. Chidori, he had decided to call it. He looked out over the village, squinting in the sinking sun. It was beautiful. The people walked the streets, looking like small ants from were he sat. He cared about every one of the ants. It was his duty to protect them. A jounin eh?

He stroked his gray hair out of his eyes, and picked up his forehead protector. As he looked out over the village, he put it on his head, and tied it up.

His first mission was tomorrow. His first mission as a jounin. Purely routine.
But despite that, he felt a stab of nervousness, which was very unlike him. Both of the sixteen year old jounin were on the team for this mission. Great. A whole mission alongside him.


“Hey Kakashi! What are you doing here. You should be training for tomorrows mission, like me,” said a confident voice. Speak of the devil.
“Hello Gai,” Kakashi sighed, without bothering to turn around.

From nowhere, black clouds started to form, clouding up the sun. Darkness washed over the village.

“You’ll never be able to beat me if you don’t train,” said Gai gleefully.
Kakashi held his mask, even though he could feel himself getting annoyed.
“Gai, may I remind you that,” he began. But he was cut short by a violent rumbeling. A low, rumbling note that shook his heart.

“What the…” he muttered.

The clouds started to get more violent, swirling around, like the contents of some black liquid in a cauldron. Thunder started to clash around, making earsplitting cracks as it hit ancient trees. The people in the village started to panic. The panic spread through the streets. At first you could here whispers. Then shouts.
Then screams, as a gigantic bolt of lightning struck, an completely pulverized a house.

Kakashi and Gai stood there, looking in awe. “What the hell is happening here,” Gai managed to shout over the roaring of the wind. Kakashi didn’t say anything. He knew as much as Gai.

The clouds started to swirl around and around, looking like a gigantic, jet black hurricane, only five times as big. The wind roared around it, swaying the huge trees dangerously. Kakashi even had to accumulate charka to his feet to stay put. Squinting into the wind, he saw something that made his mouth hang open.

Red.

The hurricane was turning red. Red color was staining the black tornado like blood in water. They spread over the whole thing, until it was a huge red tornado. Everywhere you could here the frightened shouts of people.

Kakashi shuddered. He had a bad feeling about that red twister. Was this an enemy attack?
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Hyuuga Hiashi was in his battle uniform. He had heard the commotion, and run down to get his weapons. As he came around the corner of the mansion, he was almost blown over by the wind. Struggling forward, he turned around and up a set of stairs to the roof. The Hyuuga mansion was made of wood, and he could feel its complaints beneath his feet. Dust blasting his face, he came up on to the roof. ”Byakungan,” he shouted as he came up the stairs. He took one look at the twister and screamed, leaning on the wooden rail for support. No… it couldn’t be.

“Chakra,” he whispered, staring at the twister.

“Pure chakra”
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Kakashi was now having trouble staying on his feet. By his side he could see Gai, also struggling. This couldn’t be an attack, it was too big. You would need hundreds of shinobi to get enough chakra for something that big, and besides, Konoha had no enemies…Did they?

He could see the tiles being torn of roofs in the village. Dust was flying everywhere, making it near impossible to see. The trees screeches were cut out by the rumbling note that just kept growing louder. Even with the chakra, Kakashi was having trouble standing up.

The twister was growing steadily, although it was still a way from the village. Suddenly…

Everything was silent. The wind stopped howling, and the rumbling disappeared. Kakashi could only stare, as the twister started to collapse into itself. The whole thing hit the ground, sending out a huge shockwave. They saw it before they felt it. It was coming towards them. Fast.
Gai was yelling. “GET DOWN!”
He didn’t have to ask.. Kakashi had already hit the ground. He made it just in time. The shockwave hit.

It was everything like before, amplified by one hundred. The wind ripped them both from the ground like they were paper. The roaring was unbearable, deafening out everything else. He couldn’t hear. He couldn’t see. All was swirling red, as he floated around. The wind was so powerful, it felt like he was swimming. Twice he hit something, the first being a flash of green.

Suddenly, as soon as it had started, it was over. Kakashi was slammed against the ground, so forcefully, that he almost passed out. He lay there, blinking at the stars. The moon was full, bathing the battered village in moonlight. Dust towered into the sky, almost blocking out the stars someplace. A ways away, he could hear a confused groan. What the hell was that? His head felt like it had been split with an axe. He was sure he had broken something. He was bleeding. He could feel something warm by his head, and seeping down his leg. He couldn’t move.

He had never felt so helpless.

He had always been able to handle things, mostly without getting hurt. He had almost never been in a situation were he was completely powerless. Determined, he raised his head a few inches.

What he saw made him almost pass out again. It couldn’t be!

Around him, screams started erupting. They started small, but soon, it seemed the whole town was screaming. He felt shinobi brush past him, shouting things he couldn’t hear. He just lay there, trying to comprehend the situation. It must be a genjutsu.

One more look up told him he was wrong. You couldn’t feel the chakra seeping out of a jutsu.

It was a terrible sight. Way over in the valley it stood, silhouetted against the moon. The chakra coming off it was enormous, carrying with it the intent to kill. The trees fell before it like little twigs.

It was a fox.

The blood red color was apparent, even in the dim light. It was huge. It stood there, snarling, as it looked around, confused. The nine tails stood straight up in the air, crashing around into the mountains surrounding the valley. Its body was streamlined, and the legs were long, and muscular. The teeth were as big as icebergs, and stained with spit. Its mouth was foaming. It was growling menacingly, snarling at the village. The snarls were like that of a dog, amplified to an unbearable level, shaking the village.

“The fourth. Get the fourth,” shouted a voice above him.’
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:shock:

AK47
05-13-2006, 07:17 PM
this is really good
wow i can't believe i didn't see this story
really greatly written