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badash
07-13-2005, 10:52 PM
A dark field alone and with only the moon to illuminate the ground Neji stands ready to battle himself again "I will fight this fate that tries to force me" In his eyes stands a dark Ninja ready for battle just looking at him,
"FATE" Neji stands ready as the figure speaks to him "Yes Neji I am the essence of all of your moves in life... How does that feel" the opponent laughs at Neji as he grits his teeth and tenses his body, "I will show you what I think of your rule over me" and with that Neji accelerates towards his dark nemesis letting the rage take over, But as he lets a strike free fate evades him and trips Neji so the he falls to the ground,
Neji has fought with this foe many times but has never been able to hit him even once, but even though this has always been the way he dreams of the day that he can lay a strike just one strike on the fighter that torments him and see what will happen, He finds his feet "DAMN YOU" "HA HA HA HA HA ha ha ha ha... "Neji I have you like I have everyone in this world, Look at how hard you fight sure you can defeat fools like your friend Lee but only because of MY power" Neji looks into the greatest of all his enemy's... "why do you have this power... WHY" he lets loose a volley of chakra strikes at his opponent that dodges and evades each one,
Neji stops to catch his breath and no sooner did he do that Fate made a move... "this is my chance" Neji quickly let out his chakra and span as quick as he could "Kaiten" then he noticed that Fate had stopped only an inch away from his proximity, "HA Neji you are a FOOL to think that something as weak as that would work on me, and with that sentence Neji was struck by a force so great that he flew out of his own move tearing his jacket off and ripping his bandages so that they were now hanging off,

Neji was not sure how he was blown out of his own Kaiten he thought "how comes nobody can do that other then this MONSTER" "Monster?" Fate had interrupted him though Neji was only thinking words, "You have the power to fight the fools that you see... but NEVER think that you will beat me You are NOTHING against the power that shapes your destiny...
Nejis Byakugan were now filled with tiers and he tried desperately not to let go but with this fight came memories of his father and how FATE had taken him away, A smile appeared on Fates face... "He misses you Neji" and with that Neji fell to his knees "why... WHY DO YOU DO THIS, WHY, Fate now spoke words that were so cold that Neji didn't want to hear them "because I like to show people why they are to suffer... just look at what I did with your Father.

Neji was broken once again "I will KILL YOU" and with that Neji stood up and began his greatest move "POINTS OF DIVINITY 64 STRIKES" and then all was cold... as if Neji had forgot what to do... then he noticed that Fate had won the fight,

Fate now stood behind Neji with his hand around the back of Nejis neck, "fool... you will never change your fate" and with that Neji felt a pain like no other his mind filled with thoughts that told him how weak he was and how his father had to die because fate had chose it. This pain was unlike the memories that plagued Neji as they were now a dark figure telling him that he could not do anything against this power that he hated so much,

Neji now sat alone his head on his knees and tiers falling from his eyes he had lost to fate again but this time fate had been rougher then ever before and had taken all hope away from him "what... can... I do... Father",

Neji sat alone in the darkness with nothing left to give... he had to become stronger...

Three days later he found himself in the same field and sure and all fate stood only a little way away from him "Neji why are you here... you lost against a loser and now you think that you can come beat ME" but tonight Neji was different for the first time ever fate had seen Neji smile,

"NOW we see if fate cannot be changed"

The end...

Forgive me for any wrongs in my story as I have not the heart to go through it again

Thanks

regina777
01-10-2006, 02:30 PM
i have just started surfing this part of chaos. i didnt know there were some good stories- why didnt you continue this story badash?

it looks promising- or is it just one time or just that there were no fans- i am a fan. i would like to see how it ends or continues.

badash
04-23-2006, 11:34 AM
i have just started surfing this part of chaos. i didnt know there were some good stories- why didnt you continue this story badash?

it looks promising- or is it just one time or just that there were no fans- i am a fan. i would like to see how it ends or continues.

Awwww... well I think ya the only fan there, My writing was in a terrible mess and to tell the truth I was really not planning on making anything more of it,

I kinda just see it as Neji who could never beat fate realised after Narutos victory over him that fate was only as strong as His own belief in it... So really the only thing that held him back from winning was himself,


I really cant add to it... well I guess a could do a page long story of Neji kicking his ASS, but that would be a waste of Chaos wars fuel, :D


But thank you for your comment I'm flattered that you took the time to read it :D

WalkingFish
04-26-2006, 12:01 AM
YOU SHOULD ITS GREAT

AK47
04-26-2006, 03:01 AM
i wasn't on this forum when you posted this story
i thought it was very cool and was great to read
better than mine like by a thousand
hahaha

Canthinkofaname
04-26-2006, 03:35 AM
i wasn't on this forum when you posted this story
i thought it was very cool and was great to read
better than mine like by a thousand
hahaha

thats your opinion, all fanfics are great (unless it doesnt even make sense) (plus you have more than one fanfic) but yours are good too especially the hinata one

AK47
04-26-2006, 03:38 AM
i wasn't on this forum when you posted this story
i thought it was very cool and was great to read
better than mine like by a thousand
hahaha

thats your opinion, all fanfics are great (unless it doesnt even make sense) (plus you have more than one fanfic) but yours are good too especially the hinata one
hahaaha i just wish i had better writing skills if you know what i mean
i need a better vocab and .... writing...skills
don't know how to say it but
yea this was a great fanfic and i think it should continue

badash
04-26-2006, 07:40 PM
Haha... ahhh I thought nobody cared... hey you guys ain't just saying that outta pity are ya?????


Well maybe I should BUT I need to take some time and think about what I'm writing... I made this mess up while waiting for my girlfriend to appear online so its kinda just Rush... RIGHT thank you all for ya words Please don't think they mean only a little coz there worth much more then that,

Ill think something up BUT its gonna be a Neji thing again I think:!:


OH AND ~AK:47~ Trust me don't beat yaself up dude fanfics are all about having the heart for the story and the imagination for the rest the words come as time passes,:D
I will also do the honor of reading your work and will comment for ya,

Thanks guys be ready for the new stuff soon (ish)

WalkingFish
04-27-2006, 01:16 AM
it was good and im not saying that out of pity i dpnt lie ill to straight up if didnt like it but i liked it

Veba
08-15-2006, 11:42 AM
Too early...

006
08-16-2006, 09:29 PM
Yea I really got into it, wish there were more! Great job 5/5 :P