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uub
09-20-2004, 01:32 AM
His name is Codrea. A human-like alien from the planet Crotan,also the main character. After escaping from his exploding planet, he and his older brother, Gallack, are forced to inhabit a new world. A world called Earth. On this new planet, he will face betrayal, death, new allies, and one hell of an adventure. Join Codrea on his quest to be the strongest.


Prologue: His name is Codrea........

the story begins.........

A planet is at the brink of destruction. Black winged creatures are destroying it. As meteors fall upon the hopeless blue planet, spacecrafts ship off into space. We then see a man shoving two boys onto a ship.

Older Boy: Father no! Don't leave us!

Man: Goodbye.....my sons.

The spacecraft then sped off into space. Unfortunatly it is hit by a meteor soon after departure and explodes. Luckily for the two boys, they escaped death on an escape ship. The young boy could only look in horror as his planet explodes.

Older Boy: Dammit! The explosion from the planet is gonna kill us!

He then went to then controls of the ship. Sweat went down his head as he struggled to control the ship.

Older Boy: Comon you piece of shit! Work!

The explosion was going to obliterate them when he had a stroke of genius.

Older Boy: Aha! The warp button!

He then slammed the button with his fist and the ship sped off at light speed. He could see the stars fly passed him at amazing speeds. The ship rumbled as the flew through demensions. A few moments later they were in another galaxy. Inside the ship, the boy pushed the auto pilot button and slowly took his hands off the controls. He was shaking with fear.

Older Boy: They're.....They're gone. Father....Mother...they're dead.

The younger boy, who was knocked unconscious from fighting the black, demonic creatures , had began to awaken.

Younger Boy: What......What happened? I was in a battle.

The Older Boy just stood there.

Younger Boy: Gallack where are Mom and Dad?

Gallack: They are fine. We are just gonna be on our own for awhile.

Young Boy: How long?

Gallack: Could be months, could be years. But before we do anything there is something I want you to know Codrea.

Gallack then turned around with an angry face and began to yell.

Gallack: There is'nt going to be any crying are whining! You got that runt?!

Codrea nodded with a scared look in his eyes.

Gallack: Good cuz we are continuing your training as soon as we find a planet to stay. You still can't control energy blasts.

Codrea: What do I need to train for?! I'm already know how to control energy blasts!

Gallack: Don't give me that crap. You may be able to control energy blasts for awhile. Until you lose all focus and waste all your enregy completely!

Codrea crossed his arms and tuned his head. He knew his brother was right. He could'nt control energy blasts, but his arrogance would not let him admit it.

Gallack Thinking to himself) I think its best not to tell him about Mom and Dad until he is a little older.

The lights in the ship suddenly began to flash red.

Gallack: What the hell is going on? I have to land on a nearby planet.

He then noticed a red planet on his left.

Gallack: We'll land here.

Gallack then flew the ship down to the mysterious red planet. He and Codrea exited the ship and looked around. Gallack did'nt see any buildings or any kind of life. All he saw was a forest of red, spiky rocks.

Gallack: This is the perfect place to train. You ready runt?

Codrea tried to remember his training on his old planet, Crotan.

Codrea: Ugh what am I supposed to do again???

Gallack: I'm assuming your pretty drained of your energy, correct??

Codrea then punched a rock on his left. Normally, he would be able to crush the rock to pieces. Instead his knuckles were sore and red. He began to groan in pain.

Codrea: Owwwww! Apparently so!

Gallack: Good. Being able to release large amounts of energy, even when your tired, is an important trait on the battlefeild. You see where I'm going with this??


Codrea: Yeah. Lets do it.

Codrea then stretched out his legs and squeezed his right hand.

Gallack: Remember just concentrate your energy into your palm.

Codrea sqeezed tighter as his viens popped out of his head and sweat dropped down his face. The winds started to pick up and dust flew around Codrea. He was'nt moving at all, he was focusing only on his hand. It was like nature was responding to him. A few moments later a small spark lit up in his palm. It fazed out after a few seconds. He then collapsed to his knees, breathing heavily.

Codrea: Darn it! I still cant do it!

Gallack groaned in disappiontment.

Gallack: This is the last time I'll show you.

He the extended his arm and concentrated on a large rock rock. About 5 seconds later, a ball of energy launched out his palm and blew the rock into pieces. Chunks of motar flew everywhere.

Gallack: It works better if you focus on a target.

This was the 15th time he had seen his brother do this but he could'nt help being amazed.

Gallack: Now you try.

Codrea then turned to his left to see another large rock. He then began to pose in a weird stance.

Gallack: ( Thinking to himself) What the hell does he think he is doing?

An energy ball began to take shape in his hands.

Codrea: Peeelllettt.....

The force from the energy attack was causing lightning to strike the ground.

Codrea: Gunnnnnn!!!!

The energy ball seemed like it would destroy the rock along with half of the plain that they were standing on. But before it hit the rock it shrunk to the size of a tennis ball. It barely even scathed the rock.

Gallack: Thats it! You pathetic weakling! You will never master it because youre nothing but a piece of trash!

Codrea then clunched his his fist. Red energy surged around it

Codrea: Shut up....Someday......

He then rushed at his brother with amazing speed. He was raising his fist.

Codrea: I will be the strongest!!!!!!!!

He then punched at his brother, aiming for his head.
Gallack dogded to the left before Codrea's attack connected with his face.
Codrea's attack instead went straight into a giant rock pillar, causing it to crumble to pieces. Codrea was now breathing heavily.

Codrea: Did I....Did I do that?

Gallack: ( Thinking to himself) Looks like he can only tap his power when he is really pissed. I have never seen him with such power. What a strange enrgy channel.

Gallack: Good job you passed the 1st test. Now lets go back to the ship and rest for awhile.

Codrea then collasped on the ground. Gallack picked up Codrea and returned to the ship, where they rested for 30 minutes.

Galick: Computer scan for any life on this planet.

The computer had a green line scan up and down the screen but gave no answer.

Codrea then came out of a room wearing silver armor padding. He had just awakened from his nap.

Codrea: Ah. I feel great!! Nothing like a good nap.

Gallack: Thats strange. There is no life at all on this planet. Codrea go scout this planet and see if you find anyone or anything.

Codrea did'nt really want to do it but he knew what would happen if he pissed his brother off.

Codrea: Alright.

Codrea pressed a button and the metallic door slid open. He stepped outside and jumped 500 ft. in the air and started to fly at sonic speed.

I know what your thinking. WTF? Well on Codrea's former planet, Kruton, the people there are born with superhuman strength, speed, and senses. When they are around 5 years old they learn how to control their ki, or inner energy, inabling them to fly or create energy blasts. So there you have it. Now back to our story......

Codrea grinned as the wind blew in his brown, black, and spiky hair. He loved to fly. It gave him a sense of freedom. But what he saw below mystified him. He saw a large city but no one was there. Codrea then landed on the ground.

Codrea: This place is creepy. I see buildings, but there is no one here.

Codrea then walked slowly down the deserted streets. What he did'nt know was that someone or something was staring at him with glowing red eyes. He quickly glanced behind him, but nothing was there. He then continued walking down the street when suddenly a huge creature flew out of the ground leavind a giant hole. Codrea stood in place wide eyed.

Codrea: What...What the heck is that?!

10-02-2004, 11:34 AM
Is anyone gonna reply??? :?

10-17-2004, 11:37 PM
this is tight!!!! next chapter!! EDITed because its offensive...have a good day! -Anbu Dr J

KilluaHysoka
10-18-2004, 03:32 AM
is the word "Superman" coming to anyone elses mind..

DJ Jaime
10-18-2004, 07:00 PM
is the word "Superman" coming to anyone elses mind..

NO :x

Superman's dead :cry:

uub
10-19-2004, 01:22 AM
i'll post the next part:

The creature was small. It was about 3 feet tall. It had glowing red eyes and two pincer-like claws. On its back it had thin wings like that of an insect. But the most suspising thing about the creature was that it could talk!

Creature: It has been awhile since i had fresh meat! I will feast upon your energy.

The creature attacked with its claws at lightning speed. Codrea barely escaped this fast attack. He retreated by flying in the air.

Codrea: Theres no way I'm getting eaten by some giant cockroach!

He then went in for a right-hand punch while flying fast in the air. His attack connected. It was so strong that it sent the creature flying into a building.

Codrea: Ha. He was'nt that tough.

Suddenly two red energy beams came out of the smoke where the monster had fallen. Codrea sensed the changed in the air movement and dogded the attack. The monster then slowly rose out of the smoke with glowing red eyes.

Creature: You will die like everyone else on this planet!

It then flew at Codrea with incredible speed. Codrea then charged his right fist. It began to glow with energy and sparkled with electricity. He then flew full speed at the monster.

Codrea: Eat this freak! Exploding Megaton Punch!

His fist punched a hole in the creature's face.

Codrea: Three, Two, One.

Suddenly a huge explosion lit up the sky. Codrea then floated to the ground.

Codrea: Hah! I'd like to see him get up from that!

When the smoke cleared in the air, the creature was still alive. It's head was completely blown off but to Codrea's suprise it started to regenerate!

Codrea: What the heck is that thing?!

Creature: Its useless boy! Give up and I will give you a quicker death!

Codrea: In your dreams freak!

He then shot up in to the sky and went in for a kick but the monster disappeared.

Codrea: Where did it go?!

Codrea then sensed an attack coming from behind him but it was too late. He had been sliced by the monsters claws. He watched as his silver armor was sliced in half and he now had a large cut on his chest.

Creature: You avoided being killed but next time I wont miss.

Codrea: There wont be a next time!

He then fired an energy ball at the creature but to no avail. The energy blast was absorbed into it's outer covering.

Codrea: What the heck! He ate it!

Creature: Thank you. That weak energy blast just feeds my power.

It's eyes began to glow brighter as it fired a huge eye beam at Codrea. Codrea was so afraid that he did'nt bother trying to dodge it. Instead he crossed his forearms to block it. It seemed like the blast completely engulfed him, but when the blast faded he was still in place. His body was smoking from taking the attack head on. Soon after he felll from the sky into to city streets, leaving a thick cloud of smoke.

Creature: Finnally the little brat is dead.

The creature's eyes widened as he noticed a shadow in the smoke. It was Codrea walking slowly out of the cloud. His head was bleeding along with his left arm.

Codrea: I'm not dead yet monster. I will not allow myself to die here.

Creature: What!

Codrea: I have a dream.......a dream to become the best fighter in the universe. And to become the best, I cannot allow myself to die here!!!

Codrea then began to pose in a strange stance.

Codrea: Peeellllett.......

A powerful energy ball began to form in his hands. It was causing lightning to fly everywhere.

Creature: What power...

Codrea: Gunnnn!!!!!

A white energy ball with a purple outline flew at the monster causing a giant mushroom cloud.

The scenes swithes to Gallack..

Gallack is in the core of the ship tinkering with some of the controls. Him bieng a technical genius, he knows exactly what he is doing.

Gallack: Aha! That should do it.

He then went back to the control room of the ship.

Gallack: Alright Codrea we can leave now! What? He is'nt back yet. It usually doesn't take him this long to scout a planet.

He then looked outside the window and saw the giant mushroom cloud.

Gallack: ( Thinking to himself) Dammit Codrea! What have you gotten yourself into?

He then headed outside and flew to the explosion as fast as he could.

The scene switches back Codrea.....

Codrea is standing in place as the smoke from the explosion flies around him. There is also trace amounts electricity going around him.

Codrea: That will teach him not to tick me off.

Codrea then looked closer to see that the monster still was'nt dead. It had formed an energy barrier to protect itself.

Codrea: A barrier! Man this sucks!

Creature: Did you think I would go down so easily?

Codrea: You know, for a small second , I did. But you should know that I don't quit so easily either!

Codrea then flew in the air and foolishly let out a barrrage of punches. His attacks were having no effect.

Creature: Pathetic boy! You cant break through my force feild!

Codrea: ( Thinking to himself) Man this really, really sucks!

Suddenly Codrea heard a familiar voice.

Voice: Andromeda Beam!

A thin,green energy blast broke through the monster's barrier and pierced his chest.

Codrea slowly turned to his right to see Gallack standing on the rooftop of a skyscaper. He smiled at him with relief.

Gallack: Someone call an exterminater?

The creature then began to reform the hole in its chest.

Creature: Who the hell are you?

Gallack: I'm the one thats gonna kill you. Fighting 3 year olds. Your pathetic.

Codrea: Hey! I told you I'm 3 and a half!

Gallack: As usual, I have to save you because of your weakness.

Codrea: I'm not weak! I'll show you!

Codrea then attacked then monster head on. But before he could land a punch he was blasted into a building. Gallack stared at where his little brother had crashed and turned to the monster with rage in his eyes.

Gallack: You basterd! No one beats up my brother except me!

He then flew at the monster with incredible speed. The monster blasted at him with eye beams, but he disappeared before he was hit and reappeared behind the monster. He then charged a green energy ball in his hand.

Gallack: Mini Destroyer Bomb!

The energy ball went straight into its back. Gallack stood in place waiting for the smoke to clear. About 10 seconds later the monster flew out of the smoke trying to attack him with his claws. Galick dogded the slash and kicked the monster hard in the back, causing it to fall face first into the ground. While the monster was laying lifeless in the crater, Gallack fired a barrage of energy blasts, causing a large explosion.

Gallack:( Thinking to himself) It has to be dead now. Nothing could survive that attack.

As usual the monster attacked relentlessly as it attacked again with its claws. Gallack dogded to the right and avoided his attack. He then teleported in front of the monster and chuckled as he fired a huge energy blast into its face. As the smoke cleared the monster trid to regenerate.

Gallack: Just give up. It not even fun beating the shit out of you anymore.

The creature's eyes bean to glow bright red. It then fired a huge energy blast from its eyes. It was 50 ft wide. Gallack knew he could'nt take this attack headon so he flew up to avoid it. That was his mistake. The enegy blast was heading straight for Codrea.

Gallack: Dammit!!

He then flew as fast as he could to stop the blast. He was able to prevent the blast from killing his brother, but he knew that he could'nt hold it for long. Sweat went down his head as he struggled to hold the blast back. He grinded his razorsharp teeth in pain. He could fell his arms beginning to break. He then turned behind him to see that Codrea had regain consciousness.

Gallack: You know, I'm getting tired of saving your sorry ass.

Codrea then helped his brother try to hold back the blast.

Creature: Its useless! Both of you will be turned to ashes!

Gallack knew this was true. They could'nt hold the blast back much longer.

Gallack: Are you afraid Codrea?

Codrea: No way! I learned a long time ago not to fear death!

Gallack chuckled at his brother's bravery.

Galick: Lets do it.

They created an energy blast with all their might. It started to push back the monster's blast.

Creature: There is no way!

Gallack: A little more. Just a little more.

Codrea and Galick then blasted full power at the monster, pushing back his attack completely. The monster screamed in pain as it was incinerated. There energy blast shot straight into space. They were now completely drained of energy. When the smoke cleared the monster was standing motionless. It had been completely charred brown.

Codrea: Is it....Is it dead?

Gallack: Yeah its finished. Now lets get back to the ship. About 29 minutes later they are back at the ship.

Codrea: So what is our next stop?

Gallack: Your training is'nt over. I'm gonna take you along with me to destroy planets and raid them of everything they have! Well not in that particular order but you get the idea.....

Codrea: Cool sounds fun!!

So Codrea and Gallack head off into other galaxies, pillaging them and destroying everything that gets in they're way. Codrea agrees to this because Gallack calls it "training" and that the more people he fights the stronger he will become. Gallack and Codrea become known as powerful space pirates throughout the universe and are renamed Carnage and Codrea, the Devils of Space.

Two years pass.......

Two years have passed and Codrea is now 5 years old. His memories of his former life on Krouton have been fogged by his journeys in space. Carnage and Codrea are doing their usual travels in space when they come across a beautiful blue planet.........

Codrea: What is this place Gallack?

Gallack: Some wierd planet called Earth, but who cares we will raid it destroy it and move on.

Gallack then lands the ship on Earth somwhere in the mountains.

Codrea: ( Thinking to himself) What a beautiful place! I haven't been to a planet with so much plant life.

Gallack: This place better be loaded or I'll go on another killing spree.

Codrea: You always go on a killing spree.

Gallack: Haha, yeah I know. Lets go find where they keep there currency and move on.

Codrea stared down at the ground. He did'nt really like killing people especially on a beautiful planet like this.

Codrea: Yeah lets go.

They then flew into the morning sky.

Chapter 1: The Devils Land- An Unfriendly Welcome!

whatcha think??

narutoIZZAbest
10-20-2004, 02:20 AM
good^^
though maybe you should show more detail in the writing :wink:

uub
10-21-2004, 01:34 AM
thanks for posting. the reason the writing isn't as good is because i'm just copying and pasting from another site i put this on. the recent chapters have much better writing. Heres more:

Chapter 1: The Devils Land- An Unfriendly Welcome!

The story begins......

Gallack and Codrea were flying in the morning sky, looking for places to pillage. Codrea then noticed a large city full of tall buildings and traffic.

Codrea: Mabye they keep their money there.

Gallack and Codrea decide to land there. They didn't know this but they were in Downtown, L.A. They were causing a lot of traffic. One guy honked his horn and yelled out of his window.

Man: Hey you freaks, Halloween is over. Get the hell out of the way!

The man was referring to their armor. It is'nt often that people see a teenager and a young boy dressed in armor stand in the middle of the street. Gallack then punched the hood of his car causing smoke to come out. He then ripped off his car door and yanked him by his shirt.

Galllack: Listen insect. Tell me were you keep your currency before I kill you.

The man stammered in fear.

Gallack: I'm giving you til the count of three. One, Two...

Man: Um You-you can try the-the ATM at Wells Fargo over there.

Gallack: Thank you.

Gallack then punched him in the face causing him to crash into the wall of a McDonalds, killing him. This caused a panic and people ran out of their cars in fear of being killed. Gallack then walked to the ATM the man had pointed to and read the text on then screen.

ATM: Good morning. Would you like to make a deposit or a with withdrawl?

Gallack: What the hell?

ATM: Would you like to make a deposit or a withdrawl?

Gallack: Where is your money kept?

ATM: Would you like to make a deposit or a withdrawl?

Gallack: Would you like me to torture you to death?

ATM: You have chosen "deposit". Please insert money into slot. Have a nice day!

Gallack: I want YOUR money, and I'll be DAMNED if I let you take mine!

ATM: Deposit or withdrawl?

Gallack: Shut the f*** up!

ATM: Why don't you go f*** yourself?

Gallack: ?!

He punched the machine causing it to give off electricty. He then blew a hole in the wall of the bank with an energy blast. He then headed to the bank teller and grabbed him by his shirt.

Bank Teller: Oh my God.

Gallack: Where's the money?!

The bank teller then pointed to the the vault. Gallack then threw him against the wall and headed towards the vault.

Gallack: Will you do the honors Codrea?

Codrea then formed a small energy ball and blew the vault's door off. They both glared inside the vault. There was at least 180 bags of cash. They then began to pillage the vault. While they were stealing the money, the bank teller pressed the button under his desk to call the cops. It took them about 15 minutes to clear out the vault.

Gallack: We're done here. But before we leave I wanna give you guys a going away present.

He then formed an energy ball and threw into the the floor of the bank causing the whole building to explode. The SWAT team arrive to the scene only to see that that the bank had been reduced to rubble.

One SWAT member turns to the crowd of paniced people.

SWAT member: Okay people! Nothing to see he-

His sentence was cut short when a thin, green, energy beam pierced through his chest. He then collapsed on the ground. The SWAT team turned turned to the demolished bank to see Codrea and Gallack standing on a moutain of rubble.

Gallack: Oops. my finger slipped.

After killing the SWAT member, Gallack turned to the shocked Gunmen nearby and said "Who wants to play next?"

The SWAT team opened fire.

Codrea: Bwa ha ha ha! This tickles!

Gallack: And here I thought we would at least sustain SOME damage. Sheesh! This planet sucks!"

Codrea then fired a blast and vaporized the SWAT team's vehicles.

Codrea: Too easy. Can I kill 'em bro.? Huh? Can I? Can I?

Gallack: Ugh, if it'll shut you up I suppose-

Codrea interupted.

Codrea: Hooray!

Codrea blasted through several SWAT gunmen. He then proceded to blow up random objects in his path. Do to the fact that he's a child, he prefers to just blast away the landscape instead of taking aim.

Codrea: Die, worms! HA HA HA! So much fun! DIE DIE DIE!!!

Codrea blasted them into oblivion along with half of the city.

Codrea & Gallack: Hmph! Weaklings!
*NOTE* the next parts were written by my friend so it might not follow the story well

uub
11-20-2004, 10:19 PM
damn...what happened??? :?