Kurayami storyline/training thread: Born as a Ghost [Archive]

remzrevolution

01-12-2008, 10:53 PM

Yami lay quietly in bed with her eyes closed, though her mind was elsewhere. The sounds of the children scurrying about outside the window didn't even seem to reach her ears. She wondered why she had come here, why she had given up, and more importantly, what would happen to her now.

She opened her eyes slowly, swinging her legs off the side of the bed so she could see the sign that hung outside through her window,

"Konoha orphanage"

Yami read the sign with a look of distaste. She had free food and shelter now, but at the expense of her own freedom, was it worth it? It was too late for second thoughts now. She would have to wait and place her hopes in the chance that someone would adopt her eventually. The only other option was to spend the next few years of her life stuck here.

She twirled a knife between her fingers as she thought. Subconsciously, she lifted it into the air with several invisible strings of chakra. She threaded one of the strings through the loop at the bottom of the weapon's handle, spinning it around using the other strings.

She lay on her back again now, extending her strings to move the attached knife down towards her feet, removing the single string from the loop. She let the blade float their above her toes, concentrating on wasting as little chakra as possible. She had to keep the chakra already in the strings molded together, preventing it from slipping out of her grasp, while still keeping it flexible enough to move, and yet stable enough to support a solid object.

This balancing act was hard enough without having to move the strings as it was performed, and harder still when concentrating on a target. Yami was confident in her abilities though. She had been doing this for quite a while. Though it was considered difficult to move chakra out of one's body and continue to mold it, Yami seemed to have a natural talent for it.

The real challenge was bringing it back into the body. It was much more difficult than shortening the strings the usual way by slowing letting the chakra nearest the finger slip away while pulling the rest back, but it conserved a lot of chakra, and was well worth the effort.

She started to pull the string back in, letting the chakra pass through her body and return to it's normal circulation. She was trying to do it too quickly however, and the string 'snapped' at her finger tips. Yami shot upright, quickly reattach the string in a mild panic.

She tried again, this time being careful to draw in the whole 'circumference' of the string at once. She watched the knife move slowly toward her, trying to speed it up a bit as it went. Eventually, she held the cold steel in her hand again, balancing it on her finger, as she she tried to get an idea of how much chakra she had lost.

Finally, Yami toyed around with the knife a bit, moving it into all the nooks and crannies of the room without leaving her bed. It was an interesting exercise that helped her learn to 'feel' where her chakra strings were since she couldn't see them. It wasn't particularly exhausting, but Yami kept at it until she felt her chakra pool running dry.

She pulled the knife back to her again, attempting to pull her strings' chakra back into her again. Just as the knife was about to reach her hand, Yami lost her control over her chakra, and the blade fell just short of her bed, clattering to the floor. Yami didn't even bother retrieving it, she merely rolled over and went to sleep.

OOC: manipulating attack blades jutsu learned, chakra control increase, and chakra pool increase.

papfles

01-16-2008, 01:10 PM

What you have learned:
Chakra pool increased
Chakra control increased
Manipulating attack blades jutsu learned

My CC:

Spelling mistakes

pile of => a pile of
good bye => goodbye
better off without without her => better off without her
float their => float there
to it's normal circulation => its
as she she tried => as she tried

She sat slowly as she began to read.

Reads a bit awkwardly. Restructuring or other choice of words would probably help.

she does "lay" around a bit, bit repetitive sometimes.

It's another good read, remz. The chakra strings explanation is something that I've gotten used to reading from you.
You have learned the jutsu because you already have the puppetry jutsu. But you probably know that a higher skill requires more training (and with more objects at once, but I don't doubt that you know).

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2 XP given

(I'm still trying to figure a system to accord Xp in a correct manner for everyone. I'll say that "VERY FEW spelling mistakes + char improvement that ties in with the story + a read that makes me feel like I'm not reading at all (also depends on the number of posts and the length of posts)" will be the basis for this judgment. Still trying to figure out the specifics though.)