The Path of Wind and Death, Shitsumei's Training

[TheWhiteFang]

The Path of Wind and Death, Shitsumei's Training

Tree Walking Technique
Day 1 Part 1 (http://forum.narutochaos.com/showpost.php?p=455886&postcount=2)
Day 1 Part 2 (http://forum.narutochaos.com/showpost.php?p=456013&postcount=3)
Mastery of the Blade
Part 1 (http://forum.narutochaos.com/showpost.php?p=472495&postcount=5)
Part 2 (http://forum.narutochaos.com/showpost.php?p=475524&postcount=6)
Part 3 (http://forum.narutochaos.com/showpost.php?p=487090&postcount=7)
Part 4 (http://forum.narutochaos.com/showpost.php?p=487529&postcount=8)
Taming of Kenamru (http://forum.narutochaos.com/showthread.php?t=13621)
As the Wind Blows
Part 1 (http://forum.narutochaos.com/showpost.php?p=644098&postcount=10)
Part 2 (http://forum.narutochaos.com/showpost.php?p=652940&postcount=11)
Part 3 (http://forum.narutochaos.com/showpost.php?p=671724&postcount=12)
Part 4 (http://forum.narutochaos.com/showpost.php?p=684909&postcount=13)

[TheWhiteFang]

The Journey Begins
Tree Walking Training




*Figures with black masks circle the village swiftly and silently, villagers run threw the streets gathering their children and boarding up the small scattered shacks, a bolt of lightning shoots threw the sky striking just infront of the lines of masked figures aproaching the village, a swift burst of wind slices threw their lines*

SFX:BEEP BEEP BEEP

*Shitsumei jerks awake, drenched in sweat, and quickly slams his fist into the top of the alarm clock*

-Shitsumei: (Uggh its that time already)

*Shitsumei slowly slips out of bed and throws his black hooded sweatshirt over his head and pull his black jeans to his waiste as two blades catch Shitsumei's eyes lying just to the left of his bed*

-Shitsumei: (I dont think I will need those today)

*Shitsumei slips on his black shoes and looks over towards his desk at a metal plate mounted on cloth with the symbol of the Hidden Cloud ninja carved into it*

*Shitsumei ties the forehead protector in the traditional fashion and faces toward the door of his small apartment*

-Shitsumei: (I should grab the scroll they gave me at the academy and start heading to the woods)

*Shitsume picks up the scroll on the desk next where the forehead protector was moments ago and continues out into the streets, quickly turning north towards the wetland forest just outside of the village*

*The village was still dead from the night before as Shitsumei walked threw the streets heading towards the outskirts*

*As Shitsumei was aproaching the edge of the village he noticed a shopkeeper opening a ramen stand and Shitsumei gave him a quick wave that was quickly return before the shopkeeper returned to setting up his stand*

*The buildings melding into trees as Shitsumei finally made it to his destination*

*Shitsumei searched around the wetlands until finally a large tree over 20 meters high came into veiw and Shitsumei sat below its branchs and rolled open the scroll in his pocket*

This training is to help you learn how to control your chakra. Be warned this techinique is diffucult even for a skilled ninja. You must go out and find a tall tree of at least 15 meters. Then you must build up a small, but exact, amount of chakra into the base of your feet. If you apply too much chakra you will be pushed from the tree, while if you apply to little you will simply fall off the tree. A trick to help you with this is that chakra uses spiritual energy, so if you get to exicted it becomes more difficult to control your chakra. Then you must have the stamina to hold this constant chakra flow. Put simply relax and focus on the tree. If you can master this technique a whole new world of jutsu opens up to you so go ahead, stop reading and give it a try.

*Shitsumei finishes reading the scroll and rolls it up then places it on the ground at the base of the tree*

-Shitsumei: (Alright so the trick is to relax and focus a small amount of chakra on my feet)

*Shitsumei creates a hand sign as a small wave of chakra begins to form around his feet*

-Shitsumei: (Now I must put everything out of my mind and focus soley on the tree)

*Shitsumei releases his hand signs and charges toward the tree*

*Shitsumeis feet slam into the base of the tree as he takes a few steps then the wood splinters and sends Shitsumei tumbling back towards the ground*

-Shitsumei: DAMNIT!(That was too much chakra, I need to cut back a little more and focus)

*Shitsumei makes the hand sign again and focuses his chakra into his feet)

-Shitsumei: (Thats the same amount as last time, I need to pull back a little)

*Shisumei lowers the chakra in his feet alittle before chargeing at the tree*

*Shitsumei makes it twice as many steps as the first time before simply falling from the tree*

-Shitsumei: DAMNIT THAT WAS TO LITTLE!

*Shitsumei feels slightly stupid as he relizes that there he is yelling at a tree*

-Shitsumei: (Alright I have to relax and focus, the first time was too much and the second time too little. I simply need to use a little more chakra, but not too much)

*Shitsumei, again, begins drawing chakra into his feet, constantly correcting the flow*

*Shitsumei charges the tree for a third time, passing the point that he fell at last, then continueing on for another 5 meters, making it a total of 15 meters up the tree, before the wood splintered and Shitsumei made a quick sumersault and landed gracefully on the ground*

-Shitsumei: (I was so close that time, I simply need to maintain that chakra flow a little longer and I will have it)

*Shitsumei tries to focus the chakra to the saim point again, but fails*

-Shitsumei: (Damnit I have already reached my limit, I will have to return to the village for something to eat and to rest)

*Shitsumei turns back towards the village and begins the short walk back for lunch*

END OF PART 1: Slight chakra control gained and tree walking techinique partially complete.

[TheWhiteFang]

Tree Walking Traning
Part 2

*Shitsumei finally spots the scroll that was still sitting under the great tree in the wetlands*

*With the smell of ramen still on him, Shitsumei begins to resume training*

-Shitsumei:(Alright I need to focus again, I must find that ballance once more)

*Shitsumei slowly begins gathering chakra to his feet, constantly changing the amount till he found the right balance*

-Shitsumei:(Alright focus.....there is nothing but me and the tree)

*Closing his eyes, Shitsumei focus's and the world around him becomes blacks, the only things visible are Shitsumei and the tall tree*

-Shitsumei:( Now focus... only me and the tree, nothing else matters)

*Shitsume charged at the tree, and with a small leap is already 7 meters on the tree*

*Now 10 meters, Shitsumei is begining the lose his chakra flow*

*15 meters, Shutsumei is constantly adjusting his chakras balance*

*17 meters, Shitsumei is so closed to the top he can feel it*

*18 meters, Shitsumei is aproaching the top of the tree when he loses focus and a large amount of chakra pulses threw his feet*

*The bark of the tree explodes underfoot as Shitsumei has no time to catch himself and becomes very aware of exactly how high the tree was*

*Suspened in air for only a moment Shitsumei feels almost at peace, then that feeling is replaced by a sickening feeling as Shitsumei begins his long trip back to the earth*

*Now only 5 meters from pain and possibly death, Shitsumei sees his one chance, a branch just to the right of his decent*

*Focusing all the chakra Shitsumei can muster into his hand, Shitsumei streaches his arm out, barely touching the edge of the branch*

*Shitsumeis decent is instantly stopped, his sholder almost ripping out of its socket, Shitsumei is saved from an injury that would most certainly have stopped all hope of training, but in return used up almost all of his remaining chakra*

*Letting go of the branch Shitsumei fell the last few meters back to earth, landing softly besides the scroll from earlier*

-Shitsumei:(God that last fall nearly took out my shoulder, but I think I am finally able to use this technique, if only for short bursts)

*As Shitsumei attempted to form his handsign, a sharp pain shot threw his shoulder, making Shitsumei wince in pain*

-Shitsumei:(Damnit, with my arm like this I only have maybe one or two more tries in me)

*Shitsumei forced himself to form his handsign, fighting threw the massive surges of pain, and gather chakra into his feet*

*Shitsume charged at the tree for what would be his last attempt*

*Shitsumeis feet clung to the tree as if it was lying flat, and Shitsumeri simply took one step after another*

*Passing 15 meters, Shitsumei still felt the chakra stabily flowing threw his feet*

*Now aproaching the shattered bark at 18 meters, Shitsumei felt sure of himself and continiued up the tree*

*Shitsumei now stood upright on the topmost branch of the tree, staring into the sunrise, now fully visible as Shitsumei stood above most of the trees surrounding him*

-Shitsumei:(I finally did it, I reached the top)

*Shitsumei slowly began his decent, careful not to disrupt the flow of chakra to his feet*

*Now at ground level Shitsumei bent over and picked up the academy scroll*

-Shitsumei:(This thing served me well, I should probably return it to the academy after I get some rest)

*Pointing himself southward, Shitsumei began his journey back to his small apartment to get some well deserved rest*

Training Complete:Better Chakra Control, Tree Walking Technique Learned

[Azure Wrath]

It is approved, though watch out for being a tad too repetitive.

In the beginning, your scheme was

-Try this
-Comment on why it didn't work
- Try that
- Comment on why THAT didn't work

Try to deviate from that, unless you can colour it with some descriptive flair.

Anywayz, Training approved, Tree walking learnt and Chakra Control improved

[TheWhiteFang]

Mastery of the Blade
Part 1

*The mask ninja were sliced to pieces as the funnel of wind sliced threw their ranks, making them scatter to the houses and shacks lining the street. Screams followed the ninja as they passed from house to house. A small group approached the large house at the center of the village, a female figure stood just outside the large wooden doors of the mansion, a baby in her right hand, and a kunai in her left, trying her best to completely cover the baby. The shinobi in the center of the group sends a kunai speeding towards the woman’s head. The kunai is pushed off course by a small gust of wind, and a shinobi dressed all in white appears between the woman and the black clad shinobi, gripped in his hands are two blades with white sheaths and white hilts. Seeing him, all but one of the invading shinobi scatter into the adjacent buildings. The shinobi clad in white turns and faces his wife and newborn son. He sheaths his blades and brings one hand down to touch his newborn sons head. Just and he is about to turn and face the final ninja a bolt of lightning shoots from the black clad shinobi’s hand and hits the father right in-between the shoulder blades. The shinobi approaches the corpse of his fallen enemy, the stench of charred flesh filling the air. The hilt and sheath of the two blades have turned jet black with the death of their owner. The shinobi picks them up and begins to turn him away, but the sound of a baby crying stops him in his tracks. The shinobi turns and approaches the collapsed mother, finding a hole where her heart used to be. The shinobi bends over and picks up the now orphaned child, and begins his journey back to his village, with the child village burning to the ground in his wake.*

*Shitsumei jerks awake, his body drenched in sweat. Glancing around, Shitsumei tries to find an opponent that is not there. As his eyes slowly focus in the darkness, the image of his small, one roomed, apartment comes into view. Turning to his right and sliding his feet onto the soft carpet, Shitsumei wipes the sweat from his face and stumbles to his feet, slowly sliding his hand across the wall, until he finally feels what he was searching for.*

SFX:Click, Hmmmm...

*The blinding light in the center of the room switches on, and Shitsumei raises his arm to attempt to block the shower of light until his eyes can refocus. Shitsumei then picks the small white t-shirt flung across his small dresser up, and attempts to slid it on, but is stopped by a sharp pain shooting threw his shoulder. Shitsumei looks down at the freshly bandages shoulder now drenched with sweat, and the past days events come pouring into his mind.*

-Shitsumei:(Damnit I though it would of at least healed by now.)

*Shitsumei squirms until finally he is able to slide on the white tee and walks over to the small black clock, sitting on a small table that could of easily been mistaken for a painted block of wood, and reads the bright red numbers reading 5:00.*

-Shitsumei:(Damnit I'm an hour early, I hope that she will not come too late.)

*Shitsumei slides on his black hooded-sweatshirt, wincing in pain as it passes over his injured shoulder. Then attaches his brand new pouch just above his knee, a perfect length to quickly open and retrieve items from it. After examining its contents and pulling out a neat stack of 10 explosive notes from it and placing them on his dresser. *Shitsumei slides on his black hooded-sweatshirt, wincing in pain as it passes over his injured shoulder. Then attaches his brand new pouch just above his knee, a perfect length to quickly open and retrieve items from it. After examining its contents, Shitsumei pulls out a neat stack of 10 explosive notes from it, and places them on his dresser.*

-Shitsumei:(I don’t thing that I am going to needs those for today’s training.)

*Shitsumei then slides the two blades standing next to his small bed over his head, and positions the straps in a neat "X" shape across his chest.*

-Shitsumei:(Well I better get moving, so that I can stretch and get warmed up before she gets there.)

*Shitsumei quickly moves threw the streets of the village until he begins approaching its edge. Scanning the fences and tree lines, the sign Shitsumei was looking for finally comes into view.*

Training Arena 12
Do Not Enter

*Ignoring the sign, Shitsumei climbs over the fence and walks into the middle of the medium sized arena. Even in the low light of the morning, Shitsumei could make out the arena’s features. With all the trees cleared out in a circle, except for a few stumps around the center of the arena, Shitsumei thought of it as a perfect place to train. Shitsumei walked over to one of the stumps closest to the center of the ring, and places his two blades on the soft earth. Shitsumei the stretches his arms, making sure not to pull his shoulder any worse than it already was. As Shitsumei went into an awkward position, a noise came from the gate at the entrance and a slender female figure walked in, wearing a tight dress with a large red wooden staff strapped along her back.*

-???: Well someone is up early.

*Shitsumei quickly scrambles to get back to his feet as the tall women walks over and bends down to eye level with Shitsumei.*

-???: Your not anxious to train or anything are you?

*Being so close to her make Shitsumei blush slightly and avert his eyes as he responds.*

-Shitsumei: I..I woke up early, so I decided to come down here and stretch, and I thought you would of worn something more appropriate to train in Nobara-sensei.

*An annoyed look crosses her face as Nobara Yamazakura straightens up and ties up her hair into a poney-tail with a bright red scrunchy that has a small rose attached to the top of it.*

-Yama: I have told you a hundred times to just call me Yama, and I won’t be getting this dress dirty today.

*Shitsumei walked over to his two blades sitting by the tree trunk, and slides them back on his back.*

-Shitsumei: Well then Yama-sensei, lets get this started already.

*Shitsumei draws one of his blades with his good arm and takes an offensive stance*

[TheWhiteFang]

Shitsumei stands motionless, glarring strongly at the beautiful figure before him, trying not to blink even once. Soon Shitsumeis eyes start burning as the dry wind hits them.*

-Shitsumei:(Why hasn't she attacked yet?! She always lunges at me when I even attempt to draw my sword. Damnit I cant take this much longer!)

*Finally, with his eyes tearing, Shitsumei gives up, and the world fades into darkness for a single moment. As his eyes open once more Shitsumei refocuses on the womans slender figure, but where the red dress once was is nothing but air. Shitsumei blinks a couple more times, hopeing it was a trick of the light or his brain, but then the truth hits him like a brick. Shitsumei barely had enough time to turn his head as the golden trimmed staff came slashing down from above him. With no time to react, no chance to block, Shitsumei braces himself for the inevitable feeling of sheer pain.*

SFX:THUD!!

*The sickening sound of wood slamming into flesh and bone would of made Shitsumei sick, if not for the excrusiating pain already making him sick. With the staff still on his bandaged shoulder, Shitsumei couldn't help but release a deafening yell.*

-Shitsumei:GAAAHHHHH!!! You bitch that was my injured shoulder!

*The blonde woman couldn't help but let a small smile cross her face as Shitsumei was finally faceing her.*

-Yama: Now what did I tell you about cursing infront of pretty ladies.

*Shitsumei cursed much more in his own head as he gripped the hilt of his blade so tightly that the feeling in his palm began to slowly dissapear.*

-Yama: And I also told you to never let your guard down even for a second.

*Yama's words angered Shitsumei worse then the pain she caused him. He could barely even hope of standing a chance versus a jounin one-versus-one, but Yama wasn't going to hold back, she wasn't the type.*

-Shitsumei: You could at least not use your Shushin against me when you know I'm already injured.

-Yama: Now where would the fun be in that?

*Yama's face scrunched up into a small frown as she spoke, looking like her words were truely serious, but Shitsumei knew that she wasn't going to use anything stronger than that against him.

-Shitsumei: Well then if your going to use your jutsu then I'll use mine.

*Shitsumei channels a small amount of chakra into his feet, giving him a slight burst of speed, and charges Yama.*

-Yama: A straight on attack, how boring.

*Yama raises her staff to counter Shitsumei's attack but instead of the black figure of Shitsumei charging her, a large stump was in his place, slowly rolling in her direction. Yama's frown is replace by a small grin as the genins plan became aparent.*

-Yama:Kawarimi, you silly boy.

*Yama quickly falls to the ground as a long, snow white blade cuts threw the air where her neck used to be. Slightly taken back by Shitsumeis lethal intent, Yama buries her staff deep into Shitsumeis stomach, sending him flying back into a large tree at the edge of the ring.*

-Yama: That wasn't nice Shitsumei. You could of killed me.

*Yama aproaches the spot where Shitsumei has landed, worried by the fact that he hasn't moved.*

-Yama: You can wake up any time now.

*Yama taps Shitsumei on the head with her long scarlet staff, but instead of the thud of the staff hitting soft flesh, there is a crash as it hits solid wood.*

-Yama: (A...Bushin? No Kawarim and a Bushin.)

*As the illusion disipates, the large wooden stump from earlier appears.*

-Yama: (I guess you have grown up from the academy.)

*Yama dissapears in a blur of red and yellow as Shitsumei and his blade come into veiw, only inches from where Yama was standing moments ago.*

-Shitsumei: (Damnit, Shushin again! Where is she going to come from now?)

*Shitsumei knew where she was going to be, even before having to think about it. Shitsumei quickly channeled a large amount of chakra into his right foot only, causing him to spin around at an alarming speed. As the flash of scarlet red came infront of his eyes Shitsumei instictivly raised his sword and focused chakra into his other hand and placed near the end of his blade, ready to block the massive attack.*

SFX:CHING!

*The sound of metal on metal was deafening as the gold trim of the staff clashed into the metal of the blade. Even with both hands braceing the blade, Shitsumei still couldn't stand his ground. Shitsumei was dazed and confused, as he found hiself slouched at the trunk of the large tree once again.*

-Yama: You almost got me with that one, but you wont have enough chakra for something like that again. So why dont we just called it quits for today, and I'll even throw in a bowl of ramen with a pretty lady.

*Yama gave Shitsumei a full grin and a quick wink with the last sentence, hopeing Shitsumei would take the offer and quite for the day, but Yama knew that Shitsumei still had some chakra left and would want to fight till the end.*

*Shitsumei slowly focused the last bits of his chakra into his arms and legs, forcing himself into a standing posistion.*

-Shitsumei: And let me guess, I'm paying.

*Yama giggled at Shitsumei's statement.*

-Yama: Well how could a gentleman let a pretty lady pay for a meal after dragging her to the middle of nowhere to train.

*Shitsumei knew from past experiences with this woman that no matter what he would end up paying. Recongnizing a lost cause, Shitsumei begins limping towards the gate at the other end of the arena.*

-Shitsumei: Well who could turn down an offer from a beautiful woman.

*Yama turned slowly, waiting for Shitsumei to pass by her.*

-Yama: Well, with you limping at that pace we wont make it to the elevators before sunset.

*Shitsumei ignores Yama's shot at his injuries and keeps limping ahead, not noticeing Yama's hand grabbing his arm, still gripping his blade, and throwing it over her neck, pulling Shitsumei extremely close to her face.*

-Yama: Come on now, if you hurry I might sneak you a little sake.

*Shitsumei blushes as he felt her warm breath on the side of his face. Shitsumei slowly moved between conciousness and unconciousness as Yama led him to the villages elevators, and then would take him to one of the greatests little ramen shops in the village. Afterwords, Shitsumei would welcome the soft feeling of his tiny little bed back in his apartment, constantly running over the flaws in the fight with Yama hopeing to discover how she constantly discovered where his attacks were coming from.*

[TheWhiteFang]

Shitsumei stirred awake, feeling a strange bed beneath him.*

-Shitsumei: (Whe-where am I?)

*Shitsumei slowly pulled himself up, scanning the strange room around him. Shitsumei found himself in a large room with a high ceiling and large expertly carved furniture surrounding him. Shitsumei pushed his hand into the satin sheets of the bed he was occupying, feeling the soft padding that would normally be a slab of wood and springs. Shitsumei pulled the large silk blanket off of him and turned, placing his feet on the cold, smooth, wooden floor. Shitsumei then noticed that his usually jeans and sweatshirt were replaced by soft wool pajamas that were many sizes too big. Shitsumei climbed to his feet, gripping the pajama pants to stop them from falling to the floor, as the large wooden door at the entrance of the room crept open, revealing a sleek feminine figure wearing a scarlet robe. As the figure approached, Shitsumei noticed the large tray in her arms, laden with a delicious smelling plate of something Shitsumei didn't recognize.*

-Yama: Well I'm glad you're finally awake, I thought I had killed you.

*Yama slightly grinned with the last statement, but quickly moved to Shitsumei's side and placed the tray next to him, allowing Shitsumei to see the strange looking meat that it was loaded with.*


-Shitsumei: Wha-What happened, the last thing I remember is that we were heading for the elevators after training?

*The grin left Yama's face as she remembered the past nights events.*

-Yama: Well it seems I gave you a little more of a thrashing then I realized, and you lost consciousness as we reached the higher levels of the village. So I brought you to my house and used what medical ninjutsu I know to patch up most of the muscle damage, but you still didn't regain consciousness so I brought you up here to get some sleep.

*Shitsumei then realized that his shoulder that was throbbing with pain the day before was perfectly healthy, and the blow to his stomach wasn't hurting at all. Then something strange crossed Shitsumei's mind*

-Shitsumei: Wait...if you brought me up here, then how did I end up in these clothes?

*Yama sat down on the bed, looking amused at Shitsumei still holding up the baggy pants.*

-Yama: Why, I undressed you and dressed you in those. I wasn't going to let you lie in my bed with those nasty rags on.

*Shitsumei couldn't stop his face from turning as red as the scarlet sheets of the large bed beside him.*

-Shitsumei: But this couldn't be your house, it's huge!

*Yama turned her head away from Shitsumei, obviously not wanting to answer the questioning.*

-Yama: Well my clan is influential, but anyways, how is your shoulder?

*Shitsumei rotated his should in a full circle, gripping it with his other hand.*

-Shitsumei: It feels perfectly fine, I never knew you were so good with medical ninjutsu.

-Yama: Well I don’t know very much, just enough to take care of basic injuries.

*Shitsumei was amazed by her modesty.*

-Yama: That’s enough questions for now: you need to eat up so we can continue your training.

*Shitsumei took the hint and sat back down on the bed, digging in to the greasy meat before him. As Shitsumei finished eating, Yama slid off the bed and walked over to a large, well carved dresser pulling open the two large wooden doors, that were trimmed with roses carved perfect into the wood. Yama gracefully picked up the stack of clothes with two identical blades from the bottom of the dresser.*

-Yama: It’s time that we get back to your training.

*Shitsumei eyed his blades and regular clothes, pondering what Yama was going to put him threw this time.*


*Shitsumei, now back in his old sweatshirt and jeans, straps his twin blades to his back as he approaches the outer doors of the large mansion. As Shitsumei passed threw the sliding doors of the mansion, he saw Yama standing in the large courtyard surrounded in rosebushes, with her large wooden staff stuck in the ground before her.*

-Shitsumei: So, are you just going to beat me to death again?

-Yama: Don’t worry, I won’t be your opponent this time; this time you will be fighting yourself.

*Shitsumei finally stopped a few feet from Yama, stumped by her last statement.*

-Shitsumei: How am I going to do that?

*Yama pulled her staff from the ground and walk backwards, stopping a few feet form the edge of the courtyard.*

-Yama: This time you’re not going to be fighting for real, you will be fighting illusions of yourself in a genjutsu. Just tell me when you’re ready.

*Shitsumei still didn’t understand how he was going to be training while under a genjutsu, but he would only be wasting time asking questions.*

-Shitsumei: Alright let’s get this over with.

*Shitsumei didn’t even notice Yama forming seals before she disappeared in a wall of rose petals, and in her place were three Shitsumeis, one holding a staff, another with a kusari-gama, and the third with blades identical to Shitsumei’s.*

-Shitsumei: (So this is what she meant.)

*Shitsumei barely had time to draw both his blades before the illusion with the staff was upon him. Shitsumei quickly crossed both blades, catching the staff between them. The illusion retreated, but the chain from the kusari-gama was already flying towards Shitsumei. Shitsumei tried to block it with one of his swords, but the weight caused the chain to wrap around the blade, stopping Shitsumei from pulling his sword back as the illusion attacked with the sickle.*

-Shitsumei: (Damnit, no time to block it.)

*Shitsumei brought his second blade down on the illusions head as the sickle struck him in the side, but instead of a sensation of pain the sickle passed right threw Shitsumei.*

-Shitsumei: What the hell?!

*The illusions disappeared in a wall of rose pedals and Yama appeared right where she was before the fight.*

-Yama: Well you were able to take down one illusion, but that wound would have killed you. You have to learn to not sacrifice your own life just to kill one enemy, and don’t fall for obvious traps. Now let me know when you’re ready to start again.

*Shitsumei exhaled strongly and concentrated charka into his arms.*

-Shitsumei: Alright, I’m ready.

*Yama disappeared again in a wall of rose petals and the illusions took her place.*

*Shitsumei brought his swords up and readied for them to attack.*

[TheWhiteFang]

*Shitsumei barely entered his defensive stance as the kasari-gama's chain was upon him again. Shitsumei focused chakra into his hands, but it disappeared before he could react.*

-Shitsumei: (What the hell, what happened to my chakra?!)

*The weight slammed into Shitsumei's stomach, but instead of going threw it struck like a real blow sending Shitsumei clambering back.*

-Shitsumei: (So, Yama's blocking fatal blows from hurting me, but she is letting the standard ones strike. Though, if it wasn't for me losing that chakra I would of been able to block it.)

*Shitsumei pulled himself up and channeled some of his chakra into the soles of both his feet. The illusions with the staff and blades charged at Shitsumei.*

*Shitsumei darted at the illusions, but as he approached the illusion with blades stopped in his tracks, and the staff illusion leapt into the air, bringing his staff down on top of Shitsumei.*

*Without thinking, Shitsumei channeled a large amount of chakra into his hands and crossed both blades above his head, hoping to catch the staff in the middle of the blades, but instead of feeling the staff slamming into the blades like last time, the staff was sliced into two less then a centimeter from the blades as if cut by an unseen force. As the top half of the staff separated from the illusion it disappeared into rose petals. As Shitsumei leapt backwards, he noticed the illusion carrying the staff also dissipate into rose petals.*

*Shitsumei dug his feet into the grass to slow himself down, leaving a trail as his slid to a stop. Shitsumei straightened himself and stared at his blades with amazement.*

-Shitsumei: (What the hell was that, first it eats up all the chakra I send into my hands, then it cuts threw the illusion without touching it.)

*Shitsumei barely looks up in time to see the sickle rocketing towards his head. Shitsumei collapses backwards as the sickle passes directly over his face.*

-Shitsumei: (Damn, I have to focus or Yama is going to kill me again.)

*Shitsumei stood upright, retaking his defensive stance. The two remaining illusions run to either side of him, the one with twin blades to Shitsumei's right, and the one with the kusari-gama just behind Shitsumei to the left.*

-Shitsumei: (Damnit, I barely passed the multi-opponent test in the academy, but now I have to fight two of myself.)

*Shitsumei split his stance, placing one blade facing each illusion, perpendicular with his own body. Shitsumei began focusing the last of his chakra into his hands. The chakra quickly began dissipating as the blades started glowing with a white aura extending the blade 3 inches on all sides.*

-Shitsumei: Bring it you wana be's!!

*The illusions charged Shitsumei, the kusari-gama spinning above the illusion's head, and the twin blades trailing behind the other. Shitsumei channeled all of his remaining chakra into his blades. As the illusions were both 1 meter away, Shitsumei's eyes flashed a pure white, and Shitsumei spun, releasing a massive pulse of wind chakra, slicing the illusions into many pieces blasting the leaves from the trees and bushes surrounding the courtyard, and slicing deep into the surrounding trees.*

*Yama was barely able to escape the blast, quickly using Shushin to retreat. As she approached the courtyard she found Shitsumei, collapsed in the center of the courtyard, everything around him blasted outward in a circular pattern*

-Yama: (What the hell is this kid?)

*Yama picked up Shitsumei and eyeing the two blades, clutched tightly in Shitsumei's hands. Their hilts hand a small stripe of white running down them where it was once pure black.*

*Yama carried Shitsumei back to the mansions, then placing him back in the large bed, the two blades still clutched tightly between his fingers.*

Mastery of the Blade Complete

Skill with Kawarimi increased
Skill with Twin Blades increased
Skill with Bushin increased
Chakra Control increased

[papfles]

What you’ve trained:
Chakra control increase
Chakra pool increase
Speed increase
Stamina increase
Weapon ability increase
Kawarimi increased slightly

My CC:


A small group approached the large house at the center of the village, a female figure stood just outside the large wooden doors of the mansion,

This sentence connects rather awkwardly, either use a semicolon or cut it up in multiple sentences or use a connecting word such as “where”.


picks the small white t-shirt flung across his small dresser up

The “up” is a bit too far from the verb here.


*Shitsumei slides on his black hooded-sweatshirt, wincing in pain as it passes over his injured shoulder. Then attaches his brand new pouch just above his knee, a perfect length to quickly open and retrieve items from it. After examining its contents and pulling out a neat stack of 10 explosive notes from it and placing them on his dresser. *Shitsumei slides on his black hooded-sweatshirt, wincing in pain as it passes over his injured shoulder. Then attaches his brand new pouch just above his knee, a perfect length to quickly open and retrieve items from it. After examining its contents, Shitsumei pulls out a neat stack of 10 explosive notes from it, and places them on his dresser.*

I got a déjà-vu here :p



Spelling mistakes / typing mistakes:
sons => son’s / and => as / child village => child’s village / + threw => through / bandages = bandaged / + would of => would have / thing => think / needs => need / your => you’re / make => makes or made / glarring => glaring / womans => woman’s / hopeing => hoping / excrusiating => excruciating / faceing => facing / then => than / instictivly => instinctively / hiself => himself / called => call / afterwords = afterwards / charka = chakra



You seem a bit hasty at times, re-reading your texts will surely eliminate several of these mistakes, and some are just easily avoided when you know the rule:
the –ing form of a verb does not include the E from the infinitive: hope + ing = hoping, not hopeing. I hope that helps.
The ones with a + before them are the ones you have made a lot, so paying a little more attention to those will make your training more readable.


*Yama quickly falls to the ground as a long, snow white blade cuts threw the air where her neck used to be. Slightly taken back by Shitsumeis lethal intent, Yama buries her staff deep into Shitsumeis stomach, sending him flying back into a large tree at the edge of the ring.*
-Yama: That wasn't nice Shitsumei. You could of killed me.
*Yama aproaches the spot where Shitsumei has landed, worried by the fact that he hasn't moved.*
-Yama: You can wake up any time now.
*Yama taps Shitsumei on the head with her long scarlet staff, but instead of the thud of the staff hitting soft flesh, there is a crash as it hits solid wood.*
-Yama: (A...Bushin? No Kawarim and a Bushin.)
*As the illusion disipates, the large wooden stump from earlier appears.*

So he gets hit by a staff, flies back into a tree and it appears to be a bunshin that has then kawarimi’d with a piece of wood? Dodgy…very dodgy.

First of all, a bunshin would dissipate once getting hit (either by the staff or by the tree) and since a bunshin can’t interact with the environment, it would be impossible for him to change with a piece of wood. Imagining that it was the real person getting hit, and only switching with a bunshin after landing against the tree, then still the bunshin would need to do a henge from a piece of wood to look like you, which is also not possible. So that part of your training hasn’t happened ;) This has resulted in only a very small weapon skill increase for this particular training post.




Pay attention at the use of the word “slide”, because you’ve used that word quite a lot. You replaced it once with “strapped” and that was a good choice. Try to find other words for the same thing if you can, or describe it a tad differently.


I’ll give you your “accidental use of the wind with your blades”, but you have not mastered your blades (I'm guessing the title of this part is not to insinuate that you've actually mastered it, right?). You have probably discovered that you can mix your element with the blades, but you don’t even know how it happens, and you haven’t trained in it yet. You’re just discovering how they work (you only realize they eat your chakra in the final post).
You need quite a bit of work to develop the blades and to eventually master them. You probably need to even develop your element to do all this. (This is mostly talk based on your title "mastery of the blades" actually)


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If you disagree with anything or if you have any questions, pm me ;)

[TheWhiteFang]

As the Wind Blows



Beep Beep

-???: Is he going to be okay?

-???: He's used massive amounts of chakra and sustained serious injuries

Beep Beep

-???: Damnit, what about his shinobi training?!

-???: He might not even be able to walk after what his body went through!

Beep Beep

-???: What are you talking about?! Except for a few cuts and bruises his body looks fine!

-???: It appears that his body was forced to quickly recover from some very serious injuries, this help restore his bones and muscle but it nearly destroyed his vital organs.

Beep Beep

-???: How could something like this have happened?!

-???: I don't know but whatever happened he wont be getting back to his shinobi life soon...

Beep Beep

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SFX: BBBBEEEEEEEEEEEEEEPPPPPPPPPPPPPP!!!!!!!!!!!

*Shitsumei smacked the alarm clock and pain surged threw his muscles like an electric shock. It had been three weeks since he was rescue from that horrible valley but his body still hadn't recovered. He had just recently been allowed to leave the hospital and return to his crammed apartment. Even though it was the first time he had been in it since he began his training with Yama, the apartment was spotless.*

-Shitsumei: *Yama must have sent someone over to clean it up after i left for my mission...*

*Shitsumei turned in his bed with much discomfort and spotted a small wooden frame on his nightstand that wasn't there before. Inside it was a picture of a young blonde girl. As Shitsumei grabbed the frame and brought it closer for a better look a small peace of pink cloth fell on his face. Shitsumei's nose began to spew blood as he realized it was a pair of female underwear.*
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-Shitsumei: Damnit Yama!!!

*Shitsumei put the picture back on the nightstand and examined the underwear. Suddenly the door burst open and a tall strangely dressed figure came crashing threw.*

-Chouseki: Hey you loser why didn't you call me when.....

*Chouseki stared at the underwear only a few inches from Shitsumei's face.*

-Chouseki: Ooo when did you start becoming a perv?!

-Shitsumei: Uh?! No! Its not what you think!

*Chouseki crashed onto Shitsumei's bed and snatch the underwear from his hand.*

-Chouseki: Hmm so who's are they? They're not big enough to be Yama's... Do they belong to that cute girl from the academy?

*Shitsumei snatched the underwear back from Chouseki and shoved them into the top drawer of his nightstand.*

-Shitsumei: What are you doing here anyways?

-Chouseki: Huh? Oh, Yama sent me to give you some stuff she was holding onto for you.

*Shitsumei noticed a large box Chouseki has tossed aside before charging at Shitsumei. There were weapons and scrolls pilled on top of baskets of other gear.*

-Shitsumei: What the hell is all that stuff from?

*Chouseki was busy inspecting the picture on Shitsumei's nightstand.

-Chouseki: Uh it was from some stupid holiday or contest that we missed on the mission. I got a ton of scrolls and cash.

*Shitsumei dug threw the box, separating the weapons and scrolls into one pile and the junk into another. As he got to the bottom of the box he noticed a scroll that he had seen before when browsing the jutsu store in the village.*

-Shitsumei: Zan...ku...ha... Holy crap its the jutsu I've been saving all my money up for!!

-Chouseki: Zan-ku-ha... What the hell is that?

-Shitsumei: Its a wind based jutsu that releases a burst of air by controlling air pressure by focusing chakra into a small point.

-Chouseki:...how does a nerd like you end up with a hot girl like Meku...

-Shitsumei: Shutup you idiot, I've got to learn this thing!

*Shitsumei attempted to pull himself from his bed but was forced back into it by a large wave of pain resonating from his abdomen.*

-Chouseki: Hey don't push it you dumb ass, your in no condition to do anything but sit here and daydream about your beautiful Meku!

-Shitsumei: Shutup about Meku!!

*Shitsumei slumped back into his bed and stared at the small fan slowly rotating in an endless circle.*

-Chouseki: I know your bumbed but I'll talk to Yama and see if she'll come and help you train in a few days. Don't you worry, you'll have that technique mastered before you know it!

*Chouseki left Shitsumei with the image of his stupid good guy thumbs up as he disappeared back into his own shinobi life, leaving Shitsumei with nothing to do but stare at the ceiling until he could finally return to the world of dreams and nightmares.*

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[TheWhiteFang]

Three Weeks Later

*Chouseki bounced from treetop to treetop, focusing on his objective. This time he would execute his attack with precision and stealth. He wasn't going to fail for the second time. Only a couple more yards.*

SFX: CRASH!!

*Chouseki smashed threw the flimsy window, leaving a trail of shatter wood and glass flying throughout the room.*

Chouseki: MORNING SHITSUMEI!!!

SFX: Chirp Chirp Chirp

*Chouseki scans the room to find it completly abandoned.*

Chouseki: Shitsumei...where the hell did he go?

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SFX: Splash!

???: Gah! That's cold!!!

*Shitsumei quickly pulled himself out of the iced down pond.*

Yama: If you keep that up your going to end up dieing of hypothermia.

Shitsumei: This is stupid, you can't just walk on water!

*Yama walks to the edge of the pond and effortlessly walks to the center of the pond.*

Yama: If you weren't such an idiot we could already be doing something more interesting.

Shitsumei: Shut up!

*Shitsumei began focusing his chakra into his feet. As an aura began emanating from his feet he dashed towards the pond. When his foot connected with the water instead of sinking it held firm against the water. Shitsumei brought he other foot down and as it met with the water it began to slowly sink. Quickly he tried to focus more chakra into that foot, but it was too late.*

SFX: Splash!

Shitsumei: Damnit!!

*Shitsumei once again dragged himself from the pond. He remained on all fours, shivering from the stabbing cold.*

Shitsumei: (This is just pointless, why is Yama making me keep doing this.)

Yama: Your not giving up so soon are you? Why don't you just give up and go back to your warm bed?

Shitsumei: Didn't I already tell you to shut up!

*Shitsumei pulled himself to his feet and faced the pond once more.*

Shitsumei: (If someone like her can do it so easily then what the hell is wrong with me? I have to do this if I'll ever be able to prevent something like that from happening again...)

*The image of an old lady being crushed by a large rock flashed threw Shitsumei's mind.*

*Shitsumei began focusing chakra into his feet once more, causing the grass around them to collapse under the pressure. He began the short walk to the waters edge, feeling a pulse of chakra increasing with every step.*

Shitsumei: (This is it, I wont fail another time, I'll definently walk on the water this time!)

*Shitsumei reaches the ponds edge and slowly takes the first step onto the water. His foot hits the water and holds. Shitsumei's right foot quickly follows his left and connects with the water, still holding.*

Shitsumei: (This is it, I'm finally doing it.)

*Shitsumei's left foot comes down again, still holding against the water. He takes a few more steps, continuing to remain stable on the water.*

Shitsumei: YAH! I'm finally doing it!

SFX: Splash!

Yama: You idiot, you have to keep up your concentration!

*Shitsumei channeled chakra into his hands, trying to remain stable as he pulled himself from the water.*

Yama: Well now that you've gotten that out of the way the real training can begin.

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[TheWhiteFang]

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*Chouseki jumps from roof to roof searching the entire village. Ignoring the constant yelling of the shop owners as he passes through the market district.*

Chouseki: (Damnit Shitsumei, you better not be ditching me and doing some extreme training.)

*Chouseki continues to leap from roof to roof as he feels a massive release of chakra coming from the south.*

Chouseki: (Found you!)

*Chouseki quickly Shushins until he arrives at his destination and finds a robed figure.*

Chouseki: HA! And you thought you could ditch me to do some training!

*Chouseki rips the cloak away to reveal a half naked female body, and a fist quickly closing the distance to his nose*

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*Shitsumei gets a sudden shiver running down his spine.*

Yama: Are you alright?

Shitsumei: Huh? O yea, I just got a feeling something really bad just happened.

Yama: Well if your done day-dreaming then you can get back to studying that scroll!

*Shitsumei returns his attention back to the large scroll laid out infront of him.
The scroll contains detailed descriptions on the forms and styles involved in wind ninjutsu.*

Shitsumei: Damn Yama, this is almost as bad as being back in the academy! Can't you just tell me how to do the damned jutsu?

*Shitsumei glanced at the form using a large fan-like weapon as a medium.*

Shitsumei: When the hell am I going to need to know how to use a fan medium?

*Yama smacks Shitsumei on the back of his head.*

Yama: Just finish reading the scroll and we'll get to the real training!

~30 minutes later~

Shitsumei: FINALLY!

*Shitsumei stretches his back and gets on his feet.*

Shitsumei: Come on Yama, lets get to the real training!

Yama: Fine, fine, just grab your swords and get over here.

*Shitsumei drew one of his swords and approached Yama, channeling a constant flow of chakra through it.*

Yama: Alright since I know you have already been practicing this one try using Zankuha against me.

*Without hesitating Shitsumei slashes his blade horizontally, releasing the chakra to create a wave of wind chakra flowing like a blade. The small blast hits Yama and slightly ruffles her hair.*

Yama: Wow, that was a powerful blast.

Shitsumei: Damn you!

*Shitsumei quickly channels another chunk of chakra into his blade and slices towards Yama in a diagonal slice sending a strong gust of wind exploding from the swords path. This time Yama was forced to use her staff to block the blast, leaving a small scratch on its shaft.*

Yama: Now thats a little better! Alright since you've already played around with that one lets move on to bigger and funner jutsu. Did you ever finish reading the scroll for Futon: Daitoppa?

Shitsumei: Yah, it was a real pleasant read.

Yama: Stop with the sarcasm and give the jutsu a try.

Shitsumei: Alright! Just shutup and give me a second to concentrate.

*Shitsumei raised his sword and took an offensive stance, channeling a large amount of chakra into his sword. Shitsumei built up the chakra for a few seconds then attempted to release it all in one massive burst.*

SFX: BOOM!

*A large burst of wind erupted from the sword, blasting it from his hand.*

Shitsumei: DAMN! THAT HURT!!!

Yama: You idiot, you didn't even pay attention to that scroll did you?

*Shitsumei cautiously approached his sword and poke at it as if he was expecting it to explode again. After a few seconds of treating the sword as an unexploded mine he picked it up and began inspecting it.*

Yama: If you don't even pay attention when it comes to the book work how the hell are you supposed to learn something advanced as a C-rank jutsu?!

*Shitsumei was not listening to Yama, but was more focused on smacking his katana around to see if it would explode again.*

Yama: Are you even listening to me?!

Shitsumei: Huh? Did you say something?

SFX: SMACK!!

*Shitsumei looked up just in time to see Yama's staff crashing into his nose.*

Shitsumei: Ah! That hurt!!!

Yama: Well pay attention then!

Yama: Alright now what happened with the jutsu was that you didn't pay attention to the scroll. Daitoppa isn't like Zankuha in the sense that while in Zankuha you channel your chakra into a medium then release it to form a wave of chakra infused wind that you direct and expand to attack your enemies, in Daitoppa you simply channel the chakra directly into the air surrounding your body then release it in a massive explosion of chakra infused wind in order to blast away your opponent so that you have time to regroup and prepare for another attack.

SFX: *Crickets Chirping*

Shitsumei:...

SFX: SMACK!

Shitsumei: OW! MY HEAD!!!

Yama: Well it looks like a C-rank is a little to advanced for you so we might as well go back to Zankuha.

Shitsumei: Eh, whatever...

Yama: Just shutup and practice Zankuha against that tree! I'm going off for lunch while you get busy training.

Shitsumei: What about me? I'm starving!

Yama: If I have any left overs I'll bring you some.

*Yama quickly disappears in a ploom of smoke.*

Shitsumei: (She never has any left overs to bring me.)

SFX: Grumble!

Shitsumei: Ugh, I'm hungry! This is going to be a long day...

*Shitsumei brought his sword up and entered an offensive stance, facing a large tree. He began channeling chakra into his sword as he raised it to prepare for a diagonal slash. As Shitsumei slashed with his blade he released a constant flow of chakra, creating a small ripple of wind that smashed into the tree and dispersed like a wave crashing against a rock.*

SFX: Grumble!

Shitsumei: Ugh! Sooo hungry...

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[TheWhiteFang]

*A horrible looking man was limping through the forest, his face and chest completely wrapped in blood soaked bandages. His right leg was in a full cast that stopped just above his knee, causing him to have a noticeable limp. This poor cripple remained focused on his objective as he continued to make his way through the forest. As he began to venture deeper and deeper into the woods the countless moss covered trees began to grow thicker and thicker as if they were trying to trap him. When it appeared as if he was going to become trapped between two large fur trees, a sudden gust of wind passed over him. The wind appeared to be glowing with chakra as it dispersed into the forest. The crippled man turned his attention in the direction the chakra infused wind came from. After a few minutes of weaving between tree's a small light punches threw the constant wall of wood revealing a large clearing. After a few seconds of blinding light the man looked around to see that the clearing was littered with countless branches and large chunks of wood. In the center there was a figured in large black pants and a fish net ninja undershirt leaning on a pure white katana that was still glowing with chakra. The figure began to brighten up as he saw the bandaged man limping towards him.*

Shitsumei: Holy crap Chouseki, what happened to you?!

*Chouseki's eyes began to water as he finally found his friend he had been searching for over the past five hours that inevitably landed him in the hospital.*

Chouseki: You bastard, why did you go training without me!

Shitsumei: Well I really didn't have a choice, Yama kinda just burst into my room and told me that I had to do some emergency training. She didn't even tell me why it was so urgent.

Chouseki: O ya, I forgot you've been out of it for the past few months. Well the village elders announced that they are going to be having a chuunin exam within a few days, and speaking of which you received this traveling permit a couple weeks ago along with a letter and written test.

*Chouseki produces a few papers from his pocket and hands them to Shitsumei. After reading through them Shitsumei looks up with a puzzled look on his face.*

Shitsumei: Uh...where the hell is the test?

*Chouseki's face went from a painful frown to a smiling dipshit face.*

Chouseki: Well...um...I figured since you were still unconscious that I might as well just send in both our tests together.

Shitsumei: Wait, so you copied your answers on my tests and sent it in?!

Chouseki:Kind of....

Shitsumei: Well at least I don't have to bother with that crap and can focus on my training.

*Shitsumei painfully walked over to a splintered stump in the center of the clearing and sat beside it, with his head leaning back to stare at the clouds beginning to darken and gather, warning of an approaching storm.*

Chouseki: So what the hell has been going on around here? What is with all the firewood?

Shitsumei: Just some new training I've been doing. But don't worry about that, what's up with the bandages?

Chouseki: O these, they're just...uh...battle wounds...

SFX: Gurgle grumble gurgle.

Shitsumei: Ugh...need...food...

Chouseki: Well if your done here lets go get some ramen.

Shitsumei: Sure, but we better make sure to avoid Yama...

~~~~~~~Training Complete~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

[Dream Catcher]

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