Arena 11: Desert Heat

[Azure Wrath]

Here's where the fights in Arena 11 will take place

Arena 11: Desert Heat
Size: 400m x 400m
Type: Sandy
Description: A huge vast desert. Completely desolate, bar sand and wind. Huge dunes with soft sand, make movement very hard.
Post Related Event: Sandstorm!
Posts 3-6 and 9-16: Extreme winds make movement difficult and raise terrible sandstorms, that lower visiblty alot.
http://img125.imageshack.us/img125/2479/map11desertfullua8.jpg

Please remember the PRE's. Thank you.

[oipotty]

*Clearly in his head, Asurna saw himself walking into the bridge arena he had left just the day before. Effrontery was his error then, one of his gravest enemies, but today, he walked into the stadium, eyes glinting, not with the same impudence as before, but of vicious determination. His appearance in the stadium allayed the area, as dust settled to the ground. Furtively, he peered around the arena, looking for inklings of his opponent, but there were none. With a garish glance at the arena, he observed the peaceful dust and sand, but peacefulness was only a sign of an oncoming storm... Asurna could feel it in the air. His sharp and wary glances were only ephemeral as he relented and felt inside his pouch...*


Concentration Pill
7 Kunai
5 Shuriken
7 Explosive Tags
Chakra Pill


*He was ready. He could feel a presence in the sand... a presence of another being in the barren wasteland. His opponent? The presence was illusory in the sand, but then was gone... was it there in the first place? Could it be the deceptions of the desert, or was it really his opponent.*

Asurna: Hello?

*The empty ring of his voice resounded flatly into the desert. In the distance, he could see a scorpion scurry away into the settling dust...*

[Antagonist]

OOC: sorry if I'm un-sporting but tenks has gone slightly mad for the time being if you read my training, gotta stay in character, im sure no ones feelings are hurt.

*Tenks was not in his right mind.

10 koumorigasa kunai (heirloom)
5 exploding notes
30 ft wire
40 ft rope
Charka Pill
Concentration Pill

*upon his stomach hidden behind a sand dune Tenks Ten'un shuffled through his materials, he would not be able to get any closer without becoming visable and he had to make sure his last minute preparations were sound. Instead of going to challenge Neo Tenks had instead decided to go straight to the arena, the worst of the waste of flesh shinobi's infecting this town would be there: mindlessly fighting each other for money. It would be there that Tenks would begin his cleansing. It took Tenks all his will to appear nonchalant when applying for a "friendly" arena match without the officials thinking anything was up. Yet after his opponent lay beaten on the ground, Tenks was going to end the friendly facade and kill him.

Grind his opponents eye-sockets into one and pop the eyes out to be exact.

Tenks: (after all that is my signature)

*Crawling over the final sand dune his opponent stood before him, Of all people it was Asurna: the boy with whom Tenks and Chalice were staying and who had treated them so well. Upon seeing him the disheveled wild-eyed version of Tenks then stood up.

Tenks: (ah lucky... I was hoping to get to him soon. god he sickens me)

Tenks: hah hah hah, Asurna who knew! I am looking forward to our friendly battle, It shall be good times!

*Taking two koumorigasa kunai in each hand and moving into a defensive pose Tenks was ready, his bloodline was furious as it was being fed by both the negative forces of hatred and the positive forces of the sun. even without much of an environment to feed off of It could make a difference at this level.

Tenks: hah hah hah, lets see just how much all the nunchaku training paid off chum ku, ku, ku...

Tenks knotted some of the rope into a noose and buried it under a small cover of sand behind the dune he was hiding behind

[oipotty]

As Tenks arrived, as Asurna had spotted him before he climbed over the last dune, Asurna took off his cloak with a concealed explosive tag inside of it.

*The purple-haired genin climbed over the last dune, resplendent sun shining brightly upon his face, and stood opposite to Asurna as they exchanged a glare, but upon recognition, shouted out pleasantries as they followed the pre-battle protocol.*

Asurna: Ahh, so its you, Tenks... Remember, this is the arena, and I will not treat you with the hospitably, as you currently are not my guest, but my opponent. Shall we begin, my good friend?

*Asurna looked down upon the smaller genin, eyes glinting in anticipation. Around them, vestiges of life were everywhere, but none were present. Flipping backwards, Asurna inhaled a deep breath to get him started, jumping atop a dune. With the higher elevation, Asurna could feel the exhilarating sensation of a new battle, a new quest to victory. He had to, however, concentrate upon his opponent, quickly wrapping a kunai with an explosive tag for preparation. Then, he jumped off of the dune, gaining momentum, and ran towards his opponent, attempting an ineluctable sidekick upon his opponent, while at the same time forming a handseal.*

*The sky and arena around him blurred as he flew into the air as the mercurial personality of Asurna changed from determined and vicious to calm and steadfast. Gargantuan dunes whizzed passed him as he kicked, Asurna fervid with excitement, but keeping it bottled up inside of him, taking on that steadfast manner. The excitement, however, was still boiling inside of him, waiting for the right to to be let out. Right now, however, he needed to keep his steadfast face, solemn and unrevealing... the battle had begun...*

[Antagonist]

*Asurna was fast, Tenks gave him that: and if Tenks tried to just brace for the attack he felt Asurna's pure force would probably go right through him!

Tenks: (defense is not an option...)

so instead he spread his arms to the side and then swung them back towards each other, sending the umbrella kunai in his left hand and Muscular genins right side and the umbrella kunai in his right hand at Asurna's left side. He then drew another Kunai and leapt right at him

-Tenks knotted some of the rope into a noose and buried it under a small cover of sand behind the dune he was hiding behind

-Tenks took time before the fight to pack the 2 umbrella kunai he threw full of dust and tied 10ft of wire on the back so if the umbrella kunai are deflected the dust will unlodge, coating the offender in dust. if dodged the wires will wrap around the offender, trapping him.

[oipotty]

The handseal was used to substitute with the cloak with explosive tag on it.

*Asurna's kick exposed only one side of his body as the genin continued to kick. The umbrella shaped kunais flew in a X-shaped style at Asurna, but the genin braced the attack, since only one of his sides were exposed, only one of the kunai hit. The genin continued to kick at the purple-haired genin until he saw his opponent wielding the kunai. Quickly, he closed his eye and let the attack hit as well. He was now within a meter away from his opponent, as he finally opened his eyes, smiling...*

SFX: POOF!

*And with that, a cloak replaced Asurna with a sizzling tag attached to it. As Asurna appeared from where his cloak once stood, he fired the kunai with another explosive tag attached to it at Tenks's head, blocking any other movement....*

SFX: BOOM!

*Along with the explosion, the sandstorm raged, throwing dust everywhere and upturning sand. Asurna shielded his eyes from the natural attack as he waited for his opponent. Could Tenks escape two explosions?

Asurna, taking advantage of the low visiblility in the storm and the explosion, used "Doton: Dochū Eigyo no Jutsu" to sink underground, to avoid the impacts of the storm as much as possible, leaving a clone on the surface of the earth.

[Antagonist]

OOC: i said tenks hit you in the stomach, makes more sense then a limb, another short and sweet post since you wanna go to bed...

*with Asurna suffering from two minor wounds tenk tightens the wire around him, however at the last minute asurna just manages to replace with a cloak featuring a very prominent exploding note attached to the collar!

Tenks: !!!!!!!!!, but... it was perfect! gah... fine then kawamiri no jutsu!!

tenks replaces with his 30 feet of rope placed behind the dune, however the force of the explosions still knocks him stumbling to his knees, he quickly gets up putting one hand out front and one hand behind his back, seeming to beckon at a form to come through the sandstorm in the direction he had last seen Asurna.

Tenks: (at least the sand is managing to stay out of my eyes... that was expensive rope you just ruined Asurna...)

Tenks is standing upon his 10ft noose he had covered with sand and is holding the rope to tighten it in the hand behind his back.

[oipotty]

OoC: Don't forget to rp the storms when they come!

Asurna rose from the ground after the storm slightly abated and stood behind a dune a dune, hiding himself as best. In the distance, he saw what the explosions and storm unveiled! Cacti and desert plants lay askew upon the floor... the Cacti! Forming a seal quickly, Asurna replaced with the Cacti, the Cacti hidden behind the dune. Asurna now was very clowe to his target and wrapped two explosive tags upon 2 shuriken.

*Slowly, the storm abated settling dust and sand everywhere! From the storm and explosion, cacti and other desert plants that were once thought never there lay upon the desert floor, Asurna's explosion destroying some of the scarce life in the desert. Asurna glared at his opponent... he countered a substitution with his own substitution... ingenious! Asurna wandered over towards his opponent, drawing out two nunchaku and running with great agility towards his opponent. With a hard blow, he aimed two blows at his opponent's shoulders.*

[Antagonist]

*seeing the stocky ninja barreling through the rapidly weakening storm like a bat out of hell Tenks takes a couple handfuls of dust he had packed into his pockets when filling his umbrella kunai he threw it into the air, and while steping backwards he preforms the neccessary handseals and shouts HIRU BUGU NO JUTSU, and the air suddenly becomes oppresive.

Tenks: (and you thought the storm was over hehe)

then with a quick flick of the wrist he pulls the noose hidden below the sand taunt as Asurna steps into the area, this should take asurnas feet out from under him and send him crashing backwards onto his back, the excessive movement should bind enough of the parasitic armor to him to virtually pin him down

[oipotty]

Asurna wrapped another kunai with a explosive tag, taking advantage of Tenk's concentration on his clone, to lightly throw it behind Tenks, after all, the kunai was very swift and stealthy.

*Now Asurna's goal was to truckle Tenks without effort as Asurna saw the surprises of the oncoming attacks. The extra lagniappe completely caught Asurna off guard as they all hit him... but went right through him! The clone's smile was the last on his face, smiling in the desert heat. The clone shivered and disappeared. Suddenly, two shuriken flew in front of Tenks, landing one meter in front of him, in the desert...*


SFX: BOOM!


*The explosion shook the night as three explosive tags exploded, firing each other off and covering a rather large distance. As Asurna watched the explosion, he looked warily for any more signs of Tenks, making sure he did not escape it. Just in case, he picked up a single explosive tag and wrapped it to a shuriken.*

OoC: You may read the spoilers now...

[Antagonist]

OOC: formal complaint about bunshin use... and I would also like to know where the cacti are in this completly desolate arena

[Sol]

~*Battle Complete*~

Summary Oipotty:

Oipotty recently there has been a great deal of improvement shown in your writing as a whole, which is very much evident in this battle. Your sentence structure as well as general imaging abilities are very well done and believable. Your posts were easy to read and for the most part quite enjoyable. During the initial phases of the battle, you were cool and in control, which showed in how you developed tactics and fought in your encounters. However, after the first couple of posts things went very wrong, very quickly.

In the end of your battle there were two major flaws: Your Use of Terrain and Your use of Bunshin Jutsu. These two factors really cost you significantly in the end.

The guidelines of the battlefield posted by Azure clearly state that Arena 11 is completely desolate and devoid of life. For you to find Cacti in the middle of the battle, is against the basis of the battle. The standards are there for a reason, we don't just make up stuff to fill our own conveniences when battling. In the beginning of your battle you posted that there was a Scorpion that dug itself into the sand. Although the battle arena says that there is no life, such a post is fine because it doesn't effect the battle and adds a little more appeal to your post. However, by using the Cacti which were not supposed to be there to your advantage, you essentially chose not to abide by the rules of the battle.

As for your Bunshin use at the end of the battle. Since Bunshin no jutsu only creates an illusionary clone that makes no sound and clips against the environment, the way you used the clone was inappropriate. Although you did create the clone at a previous occasion, you did not rp the clone at all. Creating a clone, then not doing anything with it, and suddenly whey you get into a bad situation saying that it was all the clone is not good rp'ing. In addition, since the clones are only illusions, in a howling sand storm your clones would have been relieved instantly. To use clones appropriately, you would have to give subtle hints that what we are seeing isn't real. You don't have go out and blatantly say that its a clone unless you want to. But subtle hints not only make clone use possible, but also make your rp'ing look more professional.

Don't be discouraged. Although this sounds like a lot to work on, it really isn't very difficult or complicated. Just spend some time reading over all the rules and the descriptions of the battle. Then make sure that you think of every possible thing that could go wrong if you make a post and address those issues.

One more minor issue. Your use of Explosive Tags verges on God Moding. Placing a tag then using it in the same post without giving your foe a chance is pretty close to god moding. Even if you still leave it up to your opponent how to take the blow, doing all that in the same post is really close. Any further and it would probably be full blatant god moding. Try and work on this a bit. Its iffy right now, but somebody might complain one day. Just make sure that you don't place and explode a tag in the same post.

Summary Von Rockin Roy:

This was a good debut battle for you VRR. Your detail work was very nice and you had the essentials that are needed for a pvp battle. It was almost as if you had done this before. Battle tactics as well as actual combat itself was all present in your posts. What really hurt your score the most, was your grammar.

Although your words were effective, the medium that you present them in (sentences) could use some work. There were many instances where you bind several thoughts into a single sentence. Although we don't expect people to have a doctrine in English, but having proper sentence structure is very important. This is especially true since all of our thoughts and ideas are expressed in written sentences. The biggest problem I see, is that you don't seem quite where to use the "." punctuation mark. For example:

*seeing the stocky ninja barreling through the rapidly weakening storm like a bat out of hell Tenks takes a couple handfuls of dust he had packed into his pockets when filling his umbrella kunai he threw it into the air, and while steping backwards he preforms the neccessary handseals and shouts HIRU BUGU NO JUTSU, and the air suddenly becomes oppresive.

Tenks: (and you thought the storm was over hehe)

then with a quick flick of the wrist he pulls the noose hidden below the sand taunt as Asurna steps into the area, this should take asurnas feet out from under him and send him crashing backwards onto his back, the excessive movement should bind enough of the parasitic armor to him to virtually pin him down

There was exactly 1 period in this entire post, but there are three paragraphs! There are at least 7 times that a period should be used, but only one of them was actually taken. I know that you can use good sentence structure, but this battle was not very convincing of that fact. Your writing would benefit greatly from some slow down. There are several times where you clearly state that you make the post short and quick so that Oipotty can respond. Although working with your partner is a good skill to have, you shouldn't let it compromise your work. Write at your own pace, not that of others. Things will work out much better that way, even if the battle does take a little longer.

General Improvement Suggestions:

One thing that I noticed with both of you that could use some work, is your spoiler content. Both of you just put spoilers in your post and do nothing more with the information that it contains. Then when your opponent just walks over and past your trap or whatever, it seems like you were surprised that your opponent avoided your trap entirely. This is a PvP rp, it is just like a duet or a pairs dance, you two need to work together. How is your opponent supposed to know that they were supposed to take damage, if you don't give them anything to work with?

You have to hint in your viewable rp that you have done something. Try and be as subtle as possible with this. If you place an explosive tag on something, rp that you reach around behind your back and fiddle with your weapon for a second. This doesn't fully say what is happening, but now your opponent has more to work with. However, if you don't hint at all, don't expect your opponent to take what ever damage would have been dished out.

Judgement:

Because of his keen use of strategy and only minor issues with grammer, Von Rockin Roy is declared the winner of this battle. He wins $200 for defeating an opponent of equal level to him.

All decisions are final and are unbiased/ non-partial. Battles and other rp's prior to this or scheduled have no bearing on this judgement.

[Antagonist]

*Kneeling down beside the fallen Asurna who was completely immobile from excessive movement within the parasitic aura after Tenks sent him barreling backwards a moment ago Tenks takes the stocky genin's hand: as if in a motion to help him up.... To asurna's suprise all Tenks does is flip him over though

Tenks: I wonder... I wonder how much I have to dig to find your worthless spine. This wasn't all fun and games Asurna! Your the first waste of flesh I shall have the privilege of wiping off this earth Ku, Ku, Ku...

SFX: Tenks brings kunai down towards Asurnas back!!

*S delicate yet firm grip tightens on Tenks arm, squeezing the pressure points so the kunai falls harmlessly to the ground.

Tenks: wha... who?

*Turning to Chalice who had suddenly appeared kneeling beside him with her eyes glaring at him as they shinning with unshod tears, only held back by a brimming fury.

Chalice: I don't know what to say...

Tenks: ...

*Chalice lets go of his arm and they left the desolate desert arena without a further word to each other: The ambience seemed even more ominous then it was when Tenks first arrived.

[Eyeshield 21]

A young boy wearing a white cloak and a guitar strapped around his left shoulder was shouting and arguing with the guard of Arena 11. The white cloak had Raga Clan written on it. Servants in Neo's home had made Neo wear this cloak, telling him that it was for Raga Clan's pride.

"...... What the hell? Are you kidding me? Is this some kind of plot against the Raga Clan?...", yelled Neo angrily after hearing these special conditions for the fight.


Arena full of weapons.
No hand seals.

Neo was sad and he starts walking in the arena which looked like a mini desert. Neo knew that the hard work that he had been doing for days now had gone completely in vain. But he thought that there was no use in comlaining now, he must think up a plan to defeat his opponent. He must use whatever he has. Neo thinks of something and starts walking back towards the guard.

As the guard sees Neo coming back, he prepares himself for a battle.

Neo asks this guard with politeness if his opponent, Tatsuya, was here. The guard surprised by this sudden change in Neo's mood gives an answer to Neo that pleases Neo very much. Neo hurries up and starts walking in the desert arena. Neo thought that he must take this opportunity and use every moment of it.

As Neo start walking in the desert arena, he realizes that walking in this soft sand arena was very hard especially when he had to climb the dunes. Neo sees the weapons like Katana etc were lying around, but he was not interested in them. He was interested in the small weapons like Kunai and Shuriken.


Neo took off his cloak as the heat was making his head blast. (Why did I have to wear this cloak today? Those Raga Clan servents..), thought Neo. On his way to the highest dune, Neo put every Kunai and every Shuriken he could see in this cloak (While keeping count of the things he was picking up.), so now the cloak worked like a luggage carrier for him. He also covered the big weapons that he saw with pile of sand, so that his opponent wouldn’t notice it and quite possibly believe that it’s a trap.


After a few minutes, Neo reaches the top of the highest dune. Neo thought this height would help him look for his opponent. He puts the cloak with gathered weapons on the soft sand. He releases some chakra into the white circle of his guitar. As he releases the chakra two blades came out of the sides of the guitar, making the guitar look like a giant axe.

He is standing on the highest dune while the wind and sand is rushing to his face. The weapon he has gathered is lying on the ground. He is looking around carefully and watching if his opponent is here or not.


Blood Pill: 2
Soldier Pill: 3
Smoke Bomb: 5
Kunai: 20 (In the white cloak)
Shuriken: 15 (In the white cloak)

[i_feel_tiredsleepy]

Daija trudged through the sand, growing up in the desert he had developed an intense hate for his natural surrounding. Observing the weapons lying on the ground, he didn't recognize half of them; as long as they had a sharp edge he could make a half decent use of them, the various staffs and complicated weapons on chains he would ignore. On a hill in the distance he could see the silhouette of a cloaked figure, from that vantage point he must have seen him comming.

Daija: (Well luckily neither of us can do hand seals)

Daija smiled as he detected the possibility that he might have an advantage in this fight.

He had come fully prepared for this battle, his pouch was bulging, and he had a few supplies in his backpack.

7 Exploding Notes
5 Metsubishi
40 Hari
13 Fukibari
5 Kunai
5 Shuriken
2 Poison Darts
2 Soldier Pills
Tinderbox
5 Bottles of water
2 Smoke Bombs
16 feet of Bandage
Canteen full of water
A bottle of Hotarimizu poison (causes slight dizziness)


Daija took that deep breath he always did to focus himself before a fight, and started his run towards the other boy, a kunai drawn quickly into his left hand from his leg holster.

Hidden in his other hand was the tool Daija hoped would give him the advantage today.

In his right hand was a metsubishi capsule filled with blinding powder, ready to be thrown into his enemies eyes when he got the chance

[Eyeshield 21]

Neo was vigilent. He was waiting for his opponent to appear. Neo sees that his opponent has finally arrived in the form of a silhouette. (Neo estimated that his opponent is at least 80 meter away..)

Neo hurried up and put all the Kunai and Shuriken he had picked up in his Black jacket’s pockets, but he did not put anything in the right pocket. Neo’s right pocket was holding something important to his plan.

The wind was getting faster in its speed, and somewhere sand was rising up and dancing with the air. Neo’s white cloak which lay empty on the ground was about to fly away, but wind was not that fast yet.

Neo looked behind and could see that a sand storm was rising behind him and it was coming right at Neo from behind. (Neo is facing his opponent so it means that sand storm will come first at Neo and then at his opponent.)

Neo looks at his opponent. The opponent had started running towards Neo.

(WHAT? A sandstorm from behind and my opponent coming at me running from front!!! I guess I am trapped I will have to run at him if I want to fight him in a clear environment. BUT is he a baka? Running on sand and wasting energy like this, specially when he has to climb this sandy dune. May be I should just make him run and tire him out.. ha ha.. no that would be too mean and inhumane, but if this was a war.. I wouldn’t have minded doing that.. I guess I will just have to take a high road..I have a plan and it is very risky for me..Also, it seems like he will be facing more than just sand..)

While Neo was thinking this, the storm from behind seemed to be approaching (distance between storm and Neo = 80 Meters). Neo quickly molded some chakra into his feet and started running with all his energy towards his opponent, who was about 20 meters away. Neo was running very swiftly on the soft sand, it was just like he was running on a normal solid surface. Neo was racing towards his opponent mainly because of two reasons, one was that Neo was climbing down from dune’s top and second was molding of chakra in his feet.

Neo took something out of his right pocket with his right hand. He hid his right hand behind his back. His left hand is clutching the top of his guitar, so that he can block any projectiles with his guitar blades. (his guitar is still strapped on his left shoulder.)

A storm was approaching from behind, and the sand in front of him and around him had already started rising up in the air, because of wind’s speed. This made visibility and running a hard thing to do.

Neo is getting closer to his opponent. And when the distance between them is around 14 feet Neo throws two smoke bombs in front of his opponent. (about 4 feet ahead of his opponent.)Before throwing these smoke bombs, Neo had started slowing down a bit.(distance between two smoke bombs.. approx. 2.5 feet.)

And as soon as those smoke bombs blasts and covers the opponent, (It may cover the opponent or just a walll of haze between them) some things happen really quickly….

Neo’s opponent would hear that some music from guitar is being played in the sky above… – and Neo dropping about 15 feet behind him


As the smoke bomb covers the opponent (hopefully) Neo jumps by releasing chakra in his feet, so that height he achieves is around 8 meters. And while Neo is in the air, he can see his opponent with a top view(if the opponent gets out of the purple haze.).

Neo had thought of two possibilities. 1. His opponent would stay in the purple haze(unlikely).. and 2. Opponent would immediately get out of the purple haze.

Neo was sure that his opponent would do according to second option, but in case his opponent doesn’t come out of the mist.. Neo shot 6 needles in the fog. All these six needles were aimed at his opponent’s last location that Neo saw.

For the second option Neo thought that as he would be way above his opponent, he would be able to see his opponent coming out of the fog from any direction. And that is why when the opponent would come out, Neo would immediately shoot 8 needles in a pair of four. (Both pairs aimed at each arm(not aimed at the same point though).)

And as Neo jumped in the air with some speed, he would be travelling in the air.. Neo would land about 15 feet behind his opponent.

[i_feel_tiredsleepy]

He had grown up in the desert and was used to the shifting uneven footing of sand. He was getting closer to his opponent as sweat slid from his brow and irritated his eyes, suddenly the other genin was running towards him, close to 14 feet his features were clearly visible.

Daija: (Is he holding a guitar? His other hand is hiding something behind his back, has to be small.)

Daija got ready to attack his opponent as they closed in, when he had a clear view of his eyes it would start... Unfortunately that never happened, smoke bombs burst at his feet envelloping him in the purple haze. He came to a sudden stop and jumped back out of the fog, he wouldn't run intto an ambush.

Tenticles of purple smoke clung to his black clothes as he burst from the smoke, he clutched his left hand around the kunai and waited for the attack that the other person had planned.

Music came from the sky, Daija looked up to try and find the source...

[Eyeshield 21]

As soon as the hazy purple smoke covers his rival, Neo had jumped in the air by releasing chakra in the feet. (Of couse, he stopped molding chakra in the feet as soon as he jumped..)

Neo was flying in the air. His height and distance were increasing. Neo could see the purple smoke from the top. That was the plan ; to look at his opponent from the top and then to strike when he comes out of it. Neo had also thought of attacking the purple smoke, just incase the opponent doesnt come out, but it didn’t quite work out as he had planned. The other Genin was quick and had gotten out of the purple haze really quickly.

Neo had a perfect view from top. It was like everything was moving in slow motion for him. Neo quickly played some chords on his guitar firing 8 sound needles at his opponent. They were aimed at the other Genin’s arms, and in two pairs of four needles. He had attacked his opponent with the needle technique of Raga Clan, while he was still getting out of the smoke and his body was still covered in puple haze. Neo attacked his opponent while he was getting out, because that way his rival would have less time to react to the attack, since his opponent's body would still be moving. (His height would be around 6-7 meters from the ground when he attacks. Four needles were aimed in such a way that each part of arm would get hit.)

These sound needles were rocketing towards the other Genin’s moving arms. Neo saw his opponent look up to him, but he had no time to see the result of his plan, which he was sure would work, because he had worked really hard on this technique and his aim was near perfect specially on moving things. He had to concentrate on his landing now.

Neo tried to land smoothly, but his guitar blade made a slight cut on his stomach. Neo quickly stood up and turned around to see the result of his plan, but he couldnt see much. The wind had grown stronger and sand had made the visibility very low. Sand storm had arrived. Neo started moving to his right, but it was really difficult to move because of the sandstorm.


@Judges: As you can see the other spoiler was just a plan.. anything could have happened if IFTS decided stop running after seein me run.. and I dont know if I should have PM'ed the plan or put it in the spoiler.

OOC: To get hit or not, its up to you..

OOC2: This is the jutsu I used (http://forum.narutochaos.com/showthread.php?p=356274#post356274), read it even if you have read it.. coz Vis told me to make some changes to it..

[i_feel_tiredsleepy]

Daija didn't have much time to react to the genin appearing right above him, instinctively he twisted his upper body to the right in hopes of making himself a smaller target. Pain shot up his left arm and he dropped his kunai as he landed on the sand and stumbled to one knee. He was bleeding from multiple small wounds on his left arm, to make matters worse he was envelloped in the swirling outskirts of a sandstorm. The small grains dug deep into the cuts and Daija gritted his teeth. "What the hell hit me? No time to think I've got to react."

The boy charged in the direction he expected to find his enemy, the boy with the guitar was only starting to be surrounded by the storm, his outline was a brownish blur in the lighter brown illuminated by the last bit of sunlight that dared to enter the storm. Daija covered his mouth and nose with his damaged left arm, squinting through the sand he launched himself at the boy the raging wind would cover his sound. As soon as he was in range Daija threw his body in the boys direction, hoping to disarm him with the impact. Still waiting for a chance to use the item in his right hand.

[Eyeshield 21]

The sand had surrounded him and his eyes were partially closed, so that the sand wouldn’t get in his eyes and he would be able to see a bit. Neo had taken out the strap of his guitar and now he was holding his guitar in his right hand. Neo didn’t want to take any risks, he felt that an attack was inevitable as his opponent would take benefit of low visibility.

Just as Neo took out his guitar, he could see that a figure was charging in. The other genin was closer than 10 feet, but because of the storm he couldn’t see clearly. The first thing Neo noticed in his rival’s attack was that he was attacking him with no big weapons. The other thing was that the other genin seemed to have covered his mouth with his left hand. "He isn’t just going to attack me with his hands, he must have some tiny weapons hidden somewhere.. I should be careful and stay away from him as far as I can.. ",thought Neo. Neo prepared the counter attack with caution as the core. (Azure told me that We can see as far as 10 feet in the storm..)

When his opponent closes in, Neo rushes forward and swings his guitar with all his might. These sharp blades were aimed at his opponent’s chest from the right side. Neo was sure that his opponent would somehow dodge this attack, but he was also sure that since his opponent’s left hand was too busy covering his mouth or may be holding some tiny weapon, he would have hard time dodging it. (His guitar length would be around 3.5 feet and hand size would be around 2.5 feet so.. the range would be approx. 6 feet..)

And as a caution Neo had started molding chakra in his feet, so he could jump when his opponent attacks him.

OOC: PM me if you have any questions.. I am tired and sleepy (:D) so I might have made some mistakes..

OOC2: Tell me when u want to finish the fight and I think we should make the storm starting to disappear in your post and completely disappear in mine..coz since the storm took time to come in it should take time to go away as well.. I think.

[i_feel_tiredsleepy]

Daija saw that the other boy had seen him comming and had responded with a swipe of his guitar, he dropped his left hand and reached out to grab the guitar as it slashed him accross the chest. With his right hand he reached to smash the metsubishi into his enemies face, with this wind flinging the blinding powder wouldn't get results. Faintly in the back of his mind, Daija's lifelong experience of living in deserts told him that the storm was dying down.

[Eyeshield 21]

Neo’s guitar blade had tasted his opponent’s blood. It had made a cut in the chest, but Neo saw that his opponent was about to catch the guitar with his left hand. Neo couldn’t let this happen.His guitar was more important to him than his own life. He leapt forward, attempting to catch the black haired Genin’s injured left arm with his own left arm.

Neo had caught his opponent’s left hand. Neo’s left side was now facing the black haired short Genin. As Neo stopped his opponent’s left hand from grabbing the guitar, the other Genin’s right hand came crashing in on the left side of Neo’s face. Neo’s eyes were almost closed because of the storm, but he didn’t get much time to react to this attack, except turning his head in the opposite direction (right direction.).

A burning sensation shot from his left eye. The water started coming out of it. Neo got hit by some kind of powder even though his eyes were squinted. Neo immediately jumped backwards by releasing chakra in his feet. Neo couldn’t open his left eye and whenever he tried doing it, he couldn’t see anything with his left eye. Neo could see with the right eye and that is why he thought of not letting go this opportunity of finding his opponent unarmed. He rushed towards his opponent with his right eye squinted. He swings his guitar with all his might at his opponent's lower body..


Neo(Scream): AAAhhhhhhhhh!!!

Amidst the sand storm and agonizing burning left eye, Neo took a Kunai from his left pocket while attacking, in case his attack fails.

OOC: Do you still want to continue? I dont see any point.. but if u do I dont have any problem...

[i_feel_tiredsleepy]

Daija heard the scream and knew an attack was comming, he drew a kunai from his leg holster with his right hand and charge towards his enemy. The two genin prepared to end the battle, one was half blind and the other seriously injured. Their blades drew closer to each other as the storm came to a sudden stop, even the desert realized the battle was over.

OOC: Submitting for judgement, since Eyeshield asked :p

[Azure Wrath]

The judges have told me the winner of this fight, though they still need to give me the reasoning.

So, i will announce the winner, then hopefulyl they will give their reasoning later.

Winner: IFTS

[Bartimaeus]

I prefer how IFTS writes and fight. Altough being a stickboy. He used his techniques like a chuunin would. That is very good. Eyeshield, you rp a genin correctly, but with the skill level you guys are at, it is about time you start acting like high level genins. IFTS Wins, but GW is very near behind. You imrpoved GW, you improved

[remzrevolution]

Mitsukai strode carelessly around the edge of the arena, surveying the sand and circling in towards the center of the arena. She draws kunai from a pouch on her leg as she walks, burying them in the sand so only the very end of the handles reach above the sand. She pushed six into the sand in a circular formation, noting where she had left them. She moved farther towards the center of the desert, burying four more kunai so they would form a square if they were connected. She stood in the center of the square, gazing across the desert. Each kunai in the square lay 5 meters away from her, and each kunai in the circle 20 meters.

A drak haired girl stood in the center of the sandy arena, her tail swaying from side to side, ears turned down so no sand would be blown into them. She occupied herself by playing with the dark ribbons wrapped around her arms as she waited for her opponent. She turned around in circles, purposefully trying to look distracted and uninterested. She checked the strap that bond her nodachi to her back lazily, thinking she would most likely not need it.



16 kunai
kaiken
8 shuriken
2 double-ended kunai
2 metsubishi
8 poison darts
6 exploding notes.
2 smoke bombs

All of the girl's explosive notes are folded into the ribbons on her arms. Three notes on each ribbon, spaced evenly. Each ribbon is six feet long

[oipotty]

7 Smoke Bomb
11 Explosive Tags
10 Shuriken
20 Hari
5 Kunai
4 Feet of Tape
4 Feet of Wire
1 blood pill
20 Hari
1 Adrenaline Pills
25 ft of Wire
2 pouches
1 plastic gourd (contains blood)
1 Straw Hat
1 Backpack


Though Takahashi didn't particularly enjoy pampering, but he let it go this time. As Splinter and Jackal bustled around his miniature apartment building in attempts to clean up and organize his equipment for the battle on this fine day, the genin's mind raced back to his previous battle. It had been his first shinobi confrontation in the Konoha-based arena. Takahashi realized how much stronger he had grown since that victory. Hoping to expand his winning streak from one to two, the boy leaving his two jounin senseis in the apartment, picked up a bag of equipment that Splinter had packed, and left.

***

Takahashi had arrived at the desert arena where he was to meet his opponent. Slowly, the boy bent down, reaching towards his gourd...


Takahashi dipped five hari and five kunai in the blood and began to corrupt it. Forced Anemic Technique. Also, the boy placed two explosive tags on two shuriken and two of the kunai


Now, he was ready to begin. He peered into the open, searching for his opponent. The opponent was in the center of the stadium. Takahashi took out two shuriken, holding them in his left hand and one kunai in his right. Then, he waited...

[remzrevolution]

Mitsukai came to a stop as she spotted her opponent crouching a ways off. She held one hand behind her back, extending the other above her head and waving to him. She smiled, as if happy to see him.

" 'Ello! I suppose we're enemies for the moment, sadly!"

Her soft voice rang out above the rising winds, which were now kicking up sand viciously and throwing the girl's long hair about wildly.

nothing to see here

EDIt: OOC: one of my spoiler tags says this: "All of the girl's explosive notes are folded into the ribbons on her arms. Three notes on each ribbon, spaced evenly. Each ribbon is six feet long". technically, I can't do that since I haven't bought any ribbon >.< consider it voided.

[oipotty]

POST 3 - Extreme winds make movement difficult and raise terrible sandstorms, that lower visiblty alot.

Takahashi - while the visibility was low - took an explosive tag and placed it upon the tip of his katana, attached by only a thing piece of tape. Precariously hanging, one swing would easily dislodge it from the katana and it would float to the ground. Then, he sheathed the sword... he would wait for the opportunity for a fast swing...

Huh? The girl just waved to him and spoke several conciliatory words to him. Takahashi waved it off and refused to reply as winds began to spin at rapid rates making it hard to see his opponent and even harder to move around with the same nimbleness as he had on open ground. The boy cursed underneath his breath and took a step back. She was waiting for him to make a move...


Takahashi jogged forward cautiously, taking note of his surroundings. As he approached, the boy took out his backpack and threw it at the girl while simultaneously taking out his katana!

[remzrevolution]

OOC: that was post 4. this is post 5...

Mitsukai slid the massive sword from her shoulder as she cautiously watched her opponent draw near. She left the binding around the blade however. She clutched the sheathed blade in her right hand as the blurred image of the boy came closer yet.

Through the haze of sand, a bulky object came hurling toward the girl. She jumped back quickly, planting her feet in the sand as she landed. The object thrown at her did not appear to be particularly dangerous, but she didn't want to take a chance since she couldn't see very well.

Her left hand snapped down into a pouch on her thigh, producing two shuriken, which she sent soaring in the direction of the attacker with a flick of her wrist, noting that she had moved back about three meters from where she had been standing

I would think that Takahashi couldn't throw the backpack more than ten meters in the wind, so i'm assuming he's somewhere in between the circle and square of kunai

Now that her opponent was approaching, Mitsukai formed chakra strings with her left hand after throwing the shuriken, aiming to attach them the the three kunai in the outer circle farthest from her, still partially buried in the sand

OOC: please give me a general idea of how far away Takahashi is fro me now. The sand would obscure direct vision, but it shouldn't mess up depth perception too badly. EDIT: oh, and obviously, i didn't jump back 3 meters all at once. she would have had to take a few steps backwards after the initial jump.

[oipotty]

OoC: Well... I was thinking at least ten meters away... Also, no specification where in the body you threw it, so I'll just say the head.


Takahashi had thrown the backpack and had drawn his katana. The opponent flipped back and threw two shuriken at him. He ducked, the projectiles spinning over him with a 'whiz'. She had moved three meters back now, enabling Takahashi to attack.

The boy, while still some distance away from his opponent (OoC: thirteen feet, I guess), threw one of the shuriken, aiming at the girl's torso. Suddenly, Takahashi began running forward, in a wide arc around towards the side of his opponent as to avoid the direct path that the shuriken took. As he did this, the boy halted slightly as he waited for the shuriken, katana in right hand while kunai in the other.


An explosive tag was attached to the shuriken. The explosive tag was still attached to the katana, ready to explode. The kunai was dipped in blood previously.


As the blade came closer, a sizzling could be heard...

[remzrevolution]

OOC: i'll say you're running in an arc to my left, just for clarity. It won't matter since the arena is symmetrical.

Mitsukai dropped her nodachi in the sand as her opponent slowed to get out of the path of her shuriken, confident that she wouldn't need it now. She watched him throw a single shuriken at her in return, then quickly run off to her left a bit, beginning to arc back toward her.

Immediately after she dropped her sword, the girl released chakra strings from her right hand to connect with the four kunai in the inner square she had set up. At the time she sent them, her opponent was somewhere within the square, but he had begun to run the her left before they could connect

The girl's cat-ears perked up now as she turned her attention back to the incoming shuriken. She sidestepped quickly to her right as she distinguished a distinct hiss coming from the shuriken. She ran a few steps to her right, to avoid the imminent blast, then slowly began circling back toward the center of the arena.

OOC: no idea what Takahashi is doing throughout all this, so i dunno how far away he is. The center of the arena, where Mitsukai was standing to begin with, will be about 8 meters in front of her, to her right by the time my post ends.

[oipotty]

She didn't seem to be doing anything... just dodging and coming back to the center. Takahashi, his shuriken missed, was now several feet to the girl's left. He quickly threw a kunai at her stomach and jumped over her, flipping upside down and aiming a slash at her head before landing on her right and retreating ten feet away again and throwing the katana in the sand.

An explosive tag was dropped from the kunai whcih would float down and land in the center of the arena. The kunai was infected with Forced Anemic.

[remzrevolution]

Mitsukai spun back to her left, trying to find her opponent again. She hadn't taken into account how long it would take her to avoid the explosion, and she had allowed him to close in on her. He lead his attack with a thrown kunai, charging in at her behind it.

The girl dropped onto her side, letting the kunai soar over her. Her eyes tracked the boy as he soared over her, swinging his sword above her. She spun to her left on her left hip quickly, swinging her right leg up at her attacker's stomach, aiming to connect with him while he was still airborne and unable to dodge.

As she first began her spin, she drew on the chakra strings reaching from her finger tips. Quickly, four kunai rose up out of the sand from near the center of the arena, then three more, in a semi-circle, from the side of the arena that the boy entered from. The closest of the four from the arena's center were only eight meters to the boy's right, and they shot towards him swiftly.

With the three kunai from the semi-circle being between twenty-four and thirty meters from the two fighters, they were too far away to be used to attack immediately, and Mitsukai only drew them closer to be used as a secondary attack later.

OOC: Here's some stuff that i had in a spoiler from my first post (don't open them): Before the match, Mitsukai set up four kunai in a square around her, each corner (a kunai) being 5 meters from her position in the center, in the center of the arena, just the ends of their handles sticking out above the sand. Between the rolling dunes and sandstorm, it would be incredibly difficult to pick them out without knowing they were there. She also set up three more in the same fashion, in a semi-circle, with each kunai in it being twenty meters from her position in the center.

YOU CAN open the spoilers in my last TWO posts ONLY, to see that I did in fact take the time to attach chakra strings.

[oipotty]

OoC: Again, you didn't specify where in the body the kunai were aimed for, so I'll say two for the head and two for the torso.

A foot came up to kick him so the boy just slashed at it with all his might, making contact and drawing blood. (OoC: You didn't block the attack to your head and therefore, I made contact.) Also, he wasn't able to continue his escape and making contact, he landed several meters away from her.

Takahashi saw the girl use some technique to levitate the projectiles from the ground and therefore began to twist. Using the momentum of the twist, he was able to launch himself into a swing of the katana. Two of the weapons missed because of his spin while one cut his head and the other cut his side.

The momentum of the swing brought him into a technique...


Cutting Whirlwind Jutsu


The attack was point-blank at the girl. She would have a hard time dodging it at all, even without those chakra strings attached to the weapons.

[remzrevolution]

OOC: I didn't specify their aim on purpose.
I did dodge your swing at my head. "The girl dropped onto her side, letting the kunai soar over her. Her eyes tracked the boy as he soared over her, swinging his sword above her."
You godmodded a hit on me. "A foot came up to kick him so the boy just slashed at it with all his might, making contact and drawing blood."
How could you have possibly landed several meters away from me if you were close enough to make contact with me?
Also wondering how you noticed the 4 knives 8 meters to your right, in the decreased visibility caused by PRE's at posts 9-16, while attacking and blocking... ANYWAYS

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Mitsukai drew her leg back down quickly, watching her blood sprayed across the sand. The injury was going to slow her down, but that was alright, it was only a distraction to begin with. Though apparently it wasn't too distracting, as her opponent turned to her approaching kunai immediately as he landed.

She jumped to her feet as he began to whirl his blade at the knives. She launched herself towards him, watching as two of her blades made contact, though the boy deflected two. She drew the three other floating blades closer still as she ran.

The girl noted that the boy was continuing his spin, though he had already blocked her knives. She jumped up, aiming a fierce kick at the boy's face before he could turn back toward her, pulling her three remaining puppet-knives at him as she did so.

OOC: Basically, in the time it took you to land, see my knives, block them, and spin, I ran up and kicked you in the face...EDIT: don't say I didn't dodge the cutting whirlwind, PLEASE. there's no way you got away with doing the jutsu before i get to you.

[oipotty]

OoC: You didn't dodge my sword and kicked up instead while I was cutting downwards. I cut your foot. I ran, jumped over you. Because I made contact, I landed several meters away from you after the jump. The weapons came at me, I spun. Two slashed me and then I came out into my technique.

I jumped over you, you ducked the kunai and I slashed. I made contact because all you did was "track my movements and kick". I landed several meters away and spun to dodge the projectiles. Two of them slashed me anyway. My one twist not only dodged two projectiles but gave me momentum into my swing. It doesn't take long to land, spin, and swing my sword. Yet, you still kick me? Whatever, I'll take it... Hope this clarifies everything for the judge. I didn't godmod, I landed several meters away after my jump, I just made a simple twist which did two things: dodge and give me momentum for my jutsu. Yet, you are still able to come up and kick me before I can land and spin a little? Try it.

I attacked and blocked in one QUICK movement. Also, sure... you can kick me in the face. It is sure not gunna stop me from swinging a sword forward.


***


Takahashi was kicked in the face and was sent backwards. He swung the sword as he was flying backwards as the wind surged forward and engulfed the girl who had just finished the kick. The boy threw the katana to the side and placed his hands together in a final seal...


The explosive tag that the genin had dropped during the flip exploded...




OoC: I'm done. We can send it in whenever.

[remzrevolution]

OOC: "flipping upside down and aiming a slash at her head before landing on her right and retreating ten feet away again and throwing the katana in the sand. "

"A foot came up to kick him so the boy just slashed at it with all his might, making contact and drawing blood. (OoC: You didn't block the attack to your head and therefore, I made contact.) Also, he wasn't able to continue his escape and making contact, he landed several meters away from her. "

based on the chronological order of your writing, you jumped/flipped THEN slashed. also, major time-modding, because you landed twice >.>

I suppose being kicked in the face and being impaled repeatedly is about the same, no effect on concentration needed to perform jutsu.

Last.... how in the name of bloody hell did you think I would not see you drop an explosive tag?

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Mitsukai planted her foot firmly on her opponent's face, kicking him back into the three knives zooming in behind him. Unfortunately, she wasn't quite fast enough to stop the boy's own plans however, as she was engulfed in a swirling, slicing wind even before she fell to the sand again.

The harsh wind tore at her flesh, tearing it open and spraying her blood into a fine mist. She cried in frustration and pain as she fell to her knees in the sand, clutching her wounds. Hopefully her knives had finished the opponent, or she was through.

Suddenly, a roaring explosion was heard behind her, singing her back and forcing her face-down into the sand, where she lay motionless, hoping her opponent was in worse shape than she was.

OOC fight be done...

EDIT: holy hell! "retreating ten feet away again and throwing the katana in the sand. "

you didn't even have the damn katana.

[oipotty]

alright... submit away.


just about the "throwing katana in the sand".

I chronicled what was supposed to happen. However, you aimed the kick and aimed the kunai at me, rping me landing and you shooting the kunai at me.

Therefore, I didn't get to the "throwing katana in sand" or "ten feet away" part because I was stopped by the kick and kunai... It never happened... that's what would've happened if you didn't attack me. That's what I was planning before you threw the kunai. The point is that never happened. It was thwarted




Now, the explosive tag was attached to the katana lightly. While I'm slicing you, I don't think you'd notice a thin slip of paper falling to the ground in low-visibility and preoccupied with my attack.

[i_feel_tiredsleepy]

The winner from a panel of three judges was Remz wins.

200 dollars to remz +1 point

No dollars to Oip -1 point

Please post new scores in the league thread (in case I forget to edit)

Judges voiced concerns over both of you having not rp'd the PRE well, and others felt that neither of you rp'd a desert setting very well.

There were concerns over the Remz abilities, but over all people felt that he stuck to a structured tactic better and that Oip's rping was weaker and all over the place.

Edit: This was a close decision.