What do you think?

[Anonymous]

Hehe... I just wanna know what you guys think. I don't really think this is how the real characters act but I tried my best...Well here goes nothing... :oops:

Chapter1:
Kurenai is looking down the patio watchin the others having a picnic near the bridge.From there Kakashi can see the lonliness across her face, Kurenai suddenly saw her fellow jounin looking up to her from under the tree.She looked back at him and smiled.Kakashi's visible eye turned into it's happy curve, a smile forming under his mask.Kurenai suddenly felt her face glowing red.She turned to see Gai, another jounin stronger than Kakashi, looking at her with a grin on his face. "You like him don't you?"
Gai asked."N-NO! No way! He's just a friend of mine." Kurenai answered now blushing more than ever.Gai chuckled. "Oh my, that is just cute! Denying you don't like him.he-he..."said Gai. "Oh shut up you ahou! Leave me alone!" kurenai told Gai. "Why, so that you could spy on your Kakashi?" Gai said now pissin Kurenai off. Kurenai punched Gai in the face leaving her fellow jounin lying knocked down on the floor.

Hehe... I'll leave it there. Please tell me what you guys think...
I say it's kinda odd though :oops: I haven't come up for the title yet.
I voted wierd..

[Anbu Dr J]

hehehe great! i like it continue!

[Lukasz]

it will be love story??

[temjinxzarron]

yea it good! Especially on your first try at writting fanfics!

[Anonymous]

It'l probably a mix of a love,comedy and action. Though I still gotta finnish this chapter.

[temjinxzarron]

Well just dont rush.

[Lukasz]

but make it quick :P
yeah no rush
it sounds interesting
P.S. dont use too many strange and hard words ok?? :P

[Anonymous]

Ok. I won't rush and I won't use any hard,strange words...Anyway wich word do you find hard?

[Anbu Dr J]

every word in the english language

[Anonymous]

Okay...

[Anbu Dr J]

yep i just hope it comes soon. But longer chaps please!

[Anonymous]

Of course the chapters would be long.this is just what I have so far in the chapter coz I'm sorta busy with my magna. I like multi-tasking...Don't ask...

[Lukasz]

dont use any word which has more than 10 letters in it :P

[Anonymous]

words like,yuzuranaindaro?hehe it's in jap. anyway here's a litle bit of the continuation of thefirst chapter:

That night, as Kurenia lay down on her bed,she tought about what happened that morning."NO! I can't fall for Kakashi!Asuma and I are getting married in a year!"Kurenai told herself. Kurenai closed her eyes and fell on a deep sleep. There, in her dream,she stands wearing her wedding dress, Asuma, right beside her about to give her a kiss, and his face uddenly turned into Kakashi's Kurenai screamed.

he he... gotta go dats all so far.

[Lukasz]

lol asuma and kurenai and kakashi :) lovely triangle.

[temjinxzarron]

nice...it's very rare for me to see fic like this.

[Anonymous]

What do you mean rare? i don't even think this one's gonna last long. I might put it on my website including the Fan Art thingy I drew...